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Lord_Vodek
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Say everything on your mind about these

[Click to view comic: 'Lord Of The Nerds']

[Click to view comic: 'Practicing']

[Click to view comic: 'Tribute to squidrabies']

[Click to view comic: 'He does listen']

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

8-08-10 11:43pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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8-08-10 11:46pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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8-08-10 11:50pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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8-08-10 11:52pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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[Click to view comic: 'Voices']

[Click to view comic: 'Another joke']

[Click to view comic: 'Slavery and McCain']

[Click to view comic: 'The Matrix: Why Neo died']

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

8-08-10 11:58pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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[Click to view comic: 'Romeo ****s up']

[Click to view comic: 'The Hero Brigade!']

[Click to view comic: 'Double Dipping']

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

8-09-10 12:01am (new)
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evil_d
Riding through your town with his head on fire

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Started out good and went downhill.

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The what mentioned above is total fiction. Please don't take it seriously!

8-09-10 7:20am (new)
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biped
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Reading them all at once is like watching an extra-wacky episode of "Laugh-In."

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Legend, oh legend, the third wheel legend...always in the way.

8-09-10 9:31am (new)
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ZMannZilla
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I only liked the first two.  The rest read like very rough first drafts of a potentially funny joke.

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"He was cursed with a horrorshow of a face, like Guiseppe Archbold doing a study of mollusk tumors."

8-09-10 10:44am (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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So they all need some work...pointers on ways to improve?

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8-09-10 12:58pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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biped wrote:

Reading them all at once is like watching an extra-wacky episode of "Laugh-In."


Thanks! I think....

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8-09-10 1:11pm (new)
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ZMannZilla
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Lord_Vodek wrote:

So they all need some work...pointers on ways to improve?


Like I said, your comics are like a Step One in a process that requires at least 5 steps.  My advice would be to take the basic idea for your strip and jot it down in, say a Notepad document or something.  Then, give it a day or so to bounce around in your head, see if you can find a way to make it wackier.

EXAMPLE 1: Jack In The Box(ers)

For this one, you've taken a pretty common joke and just kind of left it there.  This dialogue might be snappier in real life, but it doesn't support the whole comic, mostly because the punchline becomes obvious in Panel Two.  So, while workshopping this one, you may decide that slipping a "surprise" punchline into Panel Three will help this problem.  I've made a comic to demonstrate how I'd handle it:

[Click to view comic: 'Vodekution (Part One)']

EXAMPLE 2: Voices

This comic has virtually no punchline in its present state. Again, workshopping this one and tossing it around before completing the comic could have benefitted you.  I've also created a modest example of how this one could have been improved:

[Click to view comic: 'Vodekution (Part Two)']

Hope this helps.  If you'd like someone to bounce ideas off of, feel free to IM me any time.

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"He was cursed with a horrorshow of a face, like Guiseppe Archbold doing a study of mollusk tumors."

8-09-10 4:02pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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You have made my comics but better...thanks...I think...hmmm

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

8-09-10 5:14pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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8-10-10 11:51am (new)
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HCRoyall
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The sad thing is, that last group of comics pretty accurately describes any group o' newbs and quite  alot of experienced players.  And it reminds me of my current group.  Even though it makes me cry inside, I laughed on the outside.

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It was such a waste of everyone’s time and money that even the Tokyo stadium’s **** robots apologized– something they were programmed specifically never to do.

8-13-10 11:13am (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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[Click to view comic: 'Dreams']

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8-15-10 10:27pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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[Click to view comic: 'My Friday Evenings...']

 

Rewritten

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

8-16-10 9:40pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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[Click to view comic: 'The Reaper']

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8-20-10 9:04am (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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[Click to view comic: 'Advisors']

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

8-20-10 9:09am (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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[Click to view comic: 'Doc.']

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

8-20-10 2:17pm (new)
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ZMannZilla
Ex-Zombie Hunting Dad Creature

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*cough* Watchmen *cough cough*

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"He was cursed with a horrorshow of a face, like Guiseppe Archbold doing a study of mollusk tumors."

8-20-10 4:37pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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[Click to view comic: 'Why the comedian hates traveling']

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

8-21-10 10:46am (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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[Click to view comic: 'Religous Discussion With Fang And Raven']

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

8-22-10 2:24pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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Haven't made a comic in a while no inspiration this came out of nowhere...based LOOSELY on a true conversation

[Click to view comic: 'Peer Tutoring']

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

8-31-10 6:20pm (new)
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Lord_Vodek
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[Click to view comic: 'Diagnosis']

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Resident Masochist & Adrenaline Junkie -I'm probably not god but you should worship me just in case-

9-12-10 8:10pm (new)
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