Part One

http://www.stripcreator.com/view.php?author=sid_omega&ID=176210

Part Two

http://www.stripcreator.com/view.php?author=sid_omega&ID=176215

I kinda like your comics. Cut back on the narration, but you have the structure down well and your punchlines are decent.

Your comics are funny keep it up!

Thanks guys. :)

Is it just me, or do people complain about over-narration a lot on here?

Judging from my reference material on Americans (Fictional progs like 'Friends' and the like), they fall asleep after reading books...hmmm.

Anyway, i was more offended by the bastardised (American) sentence construction than the narration - which seems about as equally valid a point. Lost my train of thought again.

So what you are saying is that I...need to make my sentences better?

Less American basically:

Come get some = Come and get some
waiting on a response = waiting for a response

for instance.

And the whole thing of leaving 'dick' off the end of 'sucks dick' - there are just so many things wrong with that practice, i don't know where to start. :)

Nah man, say what you wanna. I like your shit. Talk in the way you feel most comfortable. The Ekpyro person raises a point but i figure the way you type in you stuff is good neway. Im not going to comment on the term 'less American', it kind of amuses me though because im a brit but im fairly americanised but also anti Monopoly, and america seems to monopolise over other countries a helluva lot. when was the last time you met a unitedkingdomised american? and you dont need to say dick at the end of sucks.. however central heating would be good.. 'Sucks Central Heating'. hmmmm

Thanks Monkey. I have noticed this guy analizes things way too damn much (not a bad thing) but the part when you always want a dick behind sucks disturbs me...

yeah my dick, some chick doing the sucking:) lol

oh and the amount of narration isnt always a bad thing, develop your own style lol *I write my strips for myself like my stories and shit i was writing before i discovered this site last night lol* if you dig your own stuff thats cool. and if other people find it funny too thats a bonus

I couldn't resist on this one, agilemonkey, sorry:

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im fairly americanised

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You must be, like, British or something...

hahaha, well said:) pissed myself laughing:) Aight that sucks dick comment is kind of true and i never looked at it like that. im too tired to go off on a tangent at christianity right now, as im meant to be doing coursework or calling my bird but im doing neither.. oh well illsee my bird tomoz and ive practically failed GCSE's anyway for wasting too much time when i should have been doing coursework.. guh!

And whats everyone think of my new comic about the All British Moo Mar Cow People *Talk about it in the topic i made up if you could*