Could you please read or rate or critique my comics? thank you very much.

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Could you please read or rate or critique my comics? thank you very much.

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I made another new one.

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I welcome any constructive critique.

Yet another addition to the series:

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They're getting worse. Stop concentrating so much on character development and throw some friggin' jokes in there. You've got plenty of time to develop your characters "on the side," if you will. This is a comic strip, not a soap opera.

None of them were really heinously disgustingly up-chuckingly awful, though. Except #4. (If I read through all that BS, I want there to be a joke at the end of it!!)

Thank you for the advice. I will keep that in mind.

The next 2:

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If you or any of your loved ones have read these comics, please contact your doctor immediately.
Thank you.

Could you critisize constructively, please, instead of just trying to belittle me?

Thank you.

I didn't find them that funny. I suppose it's because of the cultural barrier. Or maybe it's just because I hate Finns. Yeah, it's probably the hatred of Finns, actually.

but its Norwegians, mostly.. :\. The foreign language used in it is Norwegian. I don't speak Finnish.

I wonder why so many people dislike Scandinavia.

I don't actually live there myself.. either way. I know a lot of Scandinavians though..

Sorry, I just thought the picture was funny.

Finns, Norwegians...I don't really know the difference between them. All I know is that they induce an uncontrollable rage in me that causes me to rip my shirt off and howl.

They seem more like they're inside jokes. Try aiming for a more universal style, and many more people will appreciate the jokes.

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Finns, Norwegians...I don't really know the difference between them. All I know is that they induce an uncontrollable rage in me that causes me to rip my shirt off and howl.

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I found them to be confusing. I'd say punch up your punchlines a bit, and when in doubt, simplify. That's what I say about everything though.

Thank all of you for the advice.

I will try harder to make my comics more understandable in the future. I'll have to think for quite a while about the next one.

here is a new one which I think I have made better:

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Could you critisize constructively, please, instead of just trying to belittle me?

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Or perhaps I should say humour.

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Your latest comic is better than your previous ones, I think. It's less funny, though, if you don't know the background of the Scandy fans. I'd suggest making it funnier stand-alone, but that's just my personal preference.

Ok.. thank you very much Not_scyess for critiquing me a bit better than boinky did. I mean, I have no problem with humour but when used to belittle someone without having a point to make is just lame.. I am working on a newer comic.

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The newest installment. Based on an actual trip to Ikea.

Your comics do not adversely affect my cats, for which I am grateful.

Well that's good. I'm assuming you are saying it is bad.

What is bad about it?

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Ok.. thank you very much Not_scyess for critiquing me a bit better than boinky did. I mean, I have no problem with humour but when used to belittle someone without having a point to make is just lame.. I am working on a newer comic.

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I think that everything should be expressed through humour except for humour.

No.. I just wanted more constructive thought rather than insulting humour. I mean, it's funny, yeah, but maybe you could have made a better suggestion than the implication of "give up now.".

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No.. I just wanted more constructive thought rather than insulting humour. I mean, it's funny, yeah, but maybe you could have made a better suggestion than the implication of "give up now.".

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After reading your comics I peed blood. Thank you.

Please critisize constructively and not just belittle her. You're so lame.

... and now I know why Dagmar left here.

When making a comic, think universally. Will most everyone who reads it get the joke? If not, then expect people to say your comics suck. Especially when most of us can't read Scandinavian drivel(and I can say that because I am Scandinavian)!

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... and now I know why Dagmar left here.

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No, because she was sick and tired of being made fun of.

Awwwww....

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Please critisize constructively and not just belittle her. You're so lame.

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I think.

Rene, is that you?

I'm not Rene. And yes, I am a girl. I'm one of Rene's friends from this site, I just can't remember my old password. I used to be known as "theviciousanarchist"

Dagmar is NooniePuuBunny's younger sister that D/X tried to rape but then got raped by Noonie and now Noonie is raping Spankling because he likes it so technically its not rape.

Anyway, nobody was really making fun of Dagmar right before she left.

I can't remember anyone making fun of her either.

Wow... I don't remember anyone making fun of Dagmar, and if they were, I don't think it was in a derogatory way. What was it about, and where was the thread?

As for your own strips... Y'know, you've written about gaming, black metal, and have scandinavians running around in your strips, and on top of that, you're a girl, so you'd think that of all people, the guy whose forumuser character wears a Vintersorg shirt would be an instant drooling fanboy...

but...

umm...

The strips just aren't funny. See, I can't tell, but it seems like you might have the jokes burried somewhere in the non-english, which really sucks for people who only read english. It's one thing if a minor reccuring character comes in and says something non-english from time to time, but I would not put entire panels in foreign languages without a damn good reason, because it just makes people's eyes glaze over, and wonder what the fuck they just missed.

And also the premise makes little sense... who are you and why do you have scandinavian fanboys? How did you come across them? And why aren't there clearly understandable jokes in english along the way that makes reading about it funny?

I think that's the biggest thing. Lack of jokes. It's been said before, but it's really important... More jokes. Funny ones. In english... and that don't rely on the fact that someone speaks Norwegian to be funny as a non-sequitur. Work on that first before you start trying to thrust foreign tongues down the reader's throats.

Euh.. well I guess I should make a strip explaining why I have Scandinavian fanboys.. why should they speak English anyways? Whatever.

Well, I might as well say my origin here and then make it into a strip when I feel like it.

One of my friends runs a forum. And as a joke, on April Fool's Day, he made a subforum called the "We Love Asymptotic Notation" and well, the population of that forum is predominately Scandinavian. So, thus, Scandinavian fanboys.

But he took the forum down after a huge troll attack.. how sad.

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Valid points.

I'm still thinking about my next strip.

The vicious anarchist indeed. I bet you have know clue what true anarchy is.

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The vicious anarchist indeed. I bet you have know clue what true anarchy is.

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