I think there's definately some potential. I think you need more of a kicker for a punchline in the last panel of your comics, but I like your setups, especially in, "The King Has Returned to Claim his Throne."

I agree that you have some potential. The situations you've provided are humorous, but you don't seem clear about how to make it funny to the reader.

The first thing to do is to get rid of the narration. It's redundant, distracting, and generally a sign that you don't know what the hell you're doing. Second, know when to end the joke. The "Dude, you're insane!" line in "The King Has Returned To Claim His Throne," for example, is completely unnecessary. The joke's already been told. More emphasis doesn't help; readers will expect there to be another joke if the dialog continues.

In summary: You don't have to fill out all the fields in every comic. You've got some good ideas, you just need to learn how to better turn them into comics.

I like your latest one.

/comics/Commander_t/280047/

I'd have preferred it if Tyler in the last panel said something like "There's an ambulance right here". But still, good.

I finally have potential!! YES!!

I'm only a noob to strip creating. I'd always had some interest in it, but never any real motivation to get into it like I am, until I discovered this site in late February.

I'll take all the information I've received here and use it to the best of my abilities... seriously.

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I like your latest one.

/comics/Commander_t/280047/

I'd have preferred it if Tyler in the last panel said something like "There's an ambulance right here". But still, good.

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