Hey people new Stripper ^_^

Heres my fav so far. But feel free to check them out.. i'll update oftern.

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I like the concept, but I didn't really understand why the reaper would be charged with getting the stains out of the concrete wall behind him.

^_^ I guess it wasnt clear... i meant his clothes

I don't usually give suggestions, just deconstructive criticism, but the joke might have been funnier had you mentioned his "dry cleaning bill" or something instead. You have to be specific or the reader assumes all sorts of things(sometimes that's where the funny is, but not in this case).

rad comic

nah i welcome criticism and suggestion. Ta guys, glad you liked it :D

This must have been done before but it made me chuckle when I was trawling though the characters.

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Like the second one. The first one WOULD be funny if you had taken out the "And" at the beginning. That way, it would look like it was depressing because of the stains he gets in his clothes.

Example:

[First panel] I licked a petri dish filled with ebola to see what it tasted like.
[Third panel] I'm bleeding from my anus.

or:

[First panel] I licked a petri dish filled with ebola to see what it tasted like.
[Third panel] And I'm bleeding from my anus.

The first example makes it clear that the anal bleeding is directly related to tasting ebola, while the second sounds like the bloody anus could be coincidental.

I'm not trying to make a point here, I just like saying things like "ebola" and "bloody anus".

Am I improving ^_^

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Now that there's a good comic!

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Am I improving ^_^

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Much improved. Almost there. But you need to hit the punchline a little harder:

/comics/fuzzyman/285449/

I thought about summut like that, But as the punchline was the taste I thought it works better as the last box/scene/whatever.

Definitely better.

I actually prefer the original over the fuzzyman remix. It works better for the "taste" part to be the actual punchline.