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/comics/mandingo/293476/
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I tried to change it as little as possible.
yours is definitely better
i think not getting rid of everything after the "...blackens all it does touch!" was my mistake. i just thought it was funny to think that their family had probably committed all these senseless murders through the years just because of a prehistoric fear of fire
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here's another one i think i wrote kind of shitty because i'm not sure people got it:
/comics/mandingo/293456/
i rewrote it and think this is better:
/comics/mandingo/294336/