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mtgrnwdstar
January 10, 2007 11:26 PM

I'm not expecting any great marks (mainly because I haven't established the characters enough yet), but I'm just posting these to see what could be done to improve them and for future ideas. Here they are, in order.

/comics/mtgrnwdstar/379897/

/comics/mtgrnwdstar/379899/

/comics/mtgrnwdstar/379900/

/comics/mtgrnwdstar/379902/

There they are. Hopefully you can at least get a chuckle out of them.

Here's one more, unrelated to the series:

/comics/mtgrnwdstar/379892/

Feedback appreciated.

 

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AngryAmerican
January 11, 2007 3:21 AM

well, here's my take:

good on the multi comic storyline. cohesive and whatnot.

good message, pendantic pop music makes me want to kill....stuff

bad cuz even though i'm drunkish and stoned, i didn't even crack a smile. i think i grunted at the last one though...

i sense potential, i recommend drugs/alcohol.

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not_Scyess
January 11, 2007 6:08 AM

  Making fun of MTV -- sorry, MVT -- is a little like making fun of George Bush:  attacks on an easy target have gone on for so long that they're old and tired now.  Except the MTV jokes have been going on for even longer.  And unlike the president of the United States, if you don't like MTV you can just turn it off and ignore it.  And also unlike the president MTV never does anything new which could justify new jokes.

  That being said, I think the structure of the comis are spot-on.  You have good timing, good use of pauses, explicit punchlines (though they could use more punch), and even easy-to-read spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc.  It's only the subject matter I don't find amusing.

  And now for a personal opinion:  although it's cool to establish characters in a comic, it makes it hard for readers who read one strip at a time to come in in the middle when you have a lot of jokes that rely on background knowledge of the characters.  Not a big deal, but I thought I'd throw it out there.

  In summary:  I don't hate you.  Keep stripping, though, and you'll get it.  Or you won't.  One or the other.

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attitudechicka
January 11, 2007 7:48 AM

I liked the last one (of the series). The rest were okay.

 

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mtgrnwdstar
January 11, 2007 10:36 AM

Thanks for the (mostly) positive feedback. This was more of a 'sample' storyline anyway, so I really didn't want to do anything too elaborate yet. Good point on the 'relying on character background' topic...I like to try to tell stories with comics, sometimes at the expense of being funny. So, I should hold off on that until I do more comics.

 

Thanks a lot for the feedback, everyone.

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biped
January 11, 2007 10:48 AM

Are you really a n00b?  I noticed you used the Non Sequitur Donkey in your third comic.

If so, then you're off to a good start.

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mtgrnwdstar
January 11, 2007 10:58 AM

Thanks.

I did, in fact, use the NSD in one comic (which I believe was the last one I did until I came back, due to stuff like school and work and all that junk), which, incidentially, was the introduction of my (hopefully soon-to-be) flagship characters. So, I guess you can say I'm a semi-n00b.

By the way, here's one more. Might be funny, might not, but here it is anyway.

/comics/mtgrnwdstar/379932/

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biped
January 11, 2007 3:26 PM

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