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fraod wrote:
Hi. I don't pretend to be an expert at english, but if you're looking for help on the grammar and spelling and want specifics, I thought I'd just lend a hand to point out some things to improve on.
One example is you capitalize a lot of words in your sentences incorrectly.
Like: So, err, God, Tell me about yourself? Done anything Interesting Recently?
Should be: So, er, God. Tell me about yourself. Done anything interesting recently?
You only capitalize starts of sentences, proper names and nouns, generally. Here I've highlighted the starts of each sentence and any words that should be capitalized. I also included "Velcro" in the example because as a product or company name, it is proper to capitalize it.
Example: Today I went to the mall with my friends Jack and John. Last week we drove into Washington, D.C. and visited the Lincoln Memorial. It's July, so the weather was warm. My friend Jill asked me out on a date this Friday. We're going to go see Shoot 'Em Up. Yesterday my pants ripped and I had to Velcro them."
Doomsday.This Picture is Outside this Building Right now taken from a man which i think is somewhat Dead.Well Im Lucky Im in this Building. Lets Take a look outside. Our Reporter,Darren Blue Reporting
I thought this comic was funny, but what the anchorman said was a bit hard to read. For starters, if you're saying "Im" it's a contraction of "I Am" so you write it "I'm". Same with Lets which is a contraction of "Let Us" so you write "Let's".
Also the line "taken from a man which i think is somewhat Dead". "Which" implies more of an item than a person. "Who" would seem more proper to me.
Overall, the line would be easier to understand if it were
"Doomsday. This picture is coming from outside this building right now, taken from a man who I think is somewhat dead. Well, I'm lucky I'm in this building. Let's take a look outside. Our reporter Darren Blue reporting."
But even that sounds a bit odd. So it would be a bit better if it were (And I'm just kind of assuming the man you refer to is the camera man, you can ignore it totally if he's not):
"Doomsday. These pictures are coming from outside the building right now, taken by a cameraman who I think is dead. I'm glad I'm not out there. Now to our reporter, Darren Blue. Darren?"
In CU 11, the doctor says "there nice" refering to the nurses' boobs. There are three types of "There".
Possessive: THEIR. "Their car was stolen."
Location: THERE. "Jimmy is standing over there."
Descriptive: THEY'RE (A contraction of They Are) "They're nice." (They are nice boobs. They're nice.)
As far as spelling, I didn't notice too many mistakes. All I can think of is "Cival" which is actually spelled "Civil" and "Monthes" which is "Months".
Here's a link about contractions (They're, I'm, Let's, What's)
This link explains all the proper uses of capitalization. (Names, places, dates)
I hope this helps you make your comics even better! :) I thought CU 6, 7 and 10 were funny and I'll check out the rest of your comics, too.
Thanks alot! You were a Huge Help! My Dad is an English Graduate, so if he saw my comics he would Go mad. lol.