Sounds like a weak attempt to profess your half-assed and unoriginal religious views -- which, needless to say, no one cares about. There's no actual joke. It kind of defies the term "comic," which implies some sort of "comedy" should be going on. What you've made is sort of a "dogmic." I even went to the trouble of posting it for real, so I can rate it bad more easily:
/comics/Rimoy/421435/
On the other hand, your dialog is pretty close to being easy to follow, and you've avoided standard pitfalls such as internet abbreviations, emoticons, and trying to make actions out of dialog balloons. So you might not be totally hopeless. Just try to do something funny next time.
