Forum archives » Read My Damn Comics » A job making Game and Watchs

bartsimpson123
August 10, 2008 3:46 AM

Remember the old Game & Watch? Well, a dumb horse got a job to make them!

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dcomposed
August 10, 2008 3:50 AM

thanks for the news update.

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crabby
August 10, 2008 7:58 AM

This caught me completely off guard. It is also the funniest thing I've read all day.

Great job!

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faggot
August 10, 2008 12:38 PM

So many things wrong with this comic, where shall I start?

 

First of all, the title is too BLUNT and too LONG. For the average reader, if the title is a fuckin' epic novel they won't even want to read the comic. Secondly, shouldn't it be spelled Game and Watches? If you're not sure, why not "Working at Game and Watch"? Fucking Christ.

 

Now then, onto the character selection. A horse? Really? I was not aware that horses could speak (unless the horse, of course, is the famous mister ed), and apply for jobs. Even if they could, who the fuck is going to hire a horse? I'm not fucking retarded, so rule me out.

 

Why is this horse talking to an alien? If I saw an alien (even if I was a talking horse) I'd shit my fucking pants. I'd perform a colonic irrigation on myself. I'd fucking shit out my organs. But this talking horse (FUCK YOU) decides that talking to an alien is perfectly normal.

 

Onto the dialog. "I got a job making Game & Watchs!" Horrible. Disgusting. I puked a little on my keyboard. How does this draw the reader closer to the story? Who is the horse? What made him interested in making Game and "Watchs"? Who is the alien? A friend? A foe? A stranger? Co-worker?

 

"Idiot" One of the most blatent sentence fragments I have ever read. I'd commend you on not using a period, but I'm not going to suck on your fucking dick for some shit that was probably an accident anyway. And isn't it a little weird for the alien to be thinking this, and have nothing to say to his friend?

And to top off this shit sundae, we find that there are no more panels. We are treated to 1/3 of a comic. Not a comic, not even 2/3. 1/3 of a comic. Less than half

 

Dreadful.

 

HOWEVER, I will not rip on you and provide no example of my obviously superior writing and character selection skills. Here you go:

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biped
August 10, 2008 2:10 PM

Ha ha, I just spit blood all over my keybOH MY GOD BLOOD

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