Would very much like to hear your views on my first two strips, experimenting with the general idea.

Comic strips were not a form of media I had considered though through them I have attempted to express a critisism of the capitalistic process.

 http://www.stripcreator.com/comics/LePoupon

Triumph says: "These comics are great..FOR ME TO POUPON!!!"

I didn't see any criticism there. Perhaps you should put some in.

Or something.

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AngryAmerican wrote:

I didn't see any criticism there. Perhaps you should put some in.

Or something.

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The first was a crtitism of the idea that without managment society breaks down in on itself with everyone trying to either kill themselves or each other.

The second is the idea that despite what you face remaining in employment is paramout and without it you can't survive. 

I suppose it wasnt well put across.

Maybe satire is harder to portray in comic strips

Might experiment a little more but probably won't bother. 

Here's the thing: there are hundreds of comics on this web site alone about those same two ideas.  But the good ones express them with more clarity, more humor, and less pretension.

I don't mean to discourage you from writing more -- quite the contrary -- but I think your strips would benefit from a more accessible writing style.  Before clicking Save, try to forget that you know what you're trying to say, and imagine how they would come across to an anonymous reader.

For examples of well-known comic strips that handle satire adroitly, see Doonesbury or (for specifically employment-related satire) Dilbert.