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Any comments/critisisms of my work would be very much appriciated.

As is probably clear I'm new to this and would be greatful for any guidance i can get. Plus I love hearing what people have to say.

I'm like a prostitute with a customer satisfaction form on the dressing table you leave the money on. 

It was a funny idea (even if South Park already did it), but the punchline fell a little flat.  If I may make a humble suggestion:

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In my opinion, this way works better beacuse it's more subtle.  The joke here is that Catholics don't get into heaven.  But if you have to explicitly state "You can't get in because you're Catholic." it's like hitting the audience over the head with a brick.

Overall, though, I think you're not a bad stripper at all.  Keep going.

Genuwinely didnt know about the South Park, but like they said

"Simpson's already did it" 

The modified version is alot better. I'm gonna keep trying.

Your advise has been a great help, thank you.