I figured I'll just start with the one comic, take any compliments and/or verbal abuse, and then go from there...

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Any similarities to random viewers, living or dead, is purely coincidental.

Not painful, but not really funny or original either.

Being self-referential would seem to require being self-aware, which is more than I can say for some of the people we get around here. I say you should make some more and see how they turn out.

Most things that can be described in narration strips can be done better with dialogue instead. If you try remaking this strip without the narration (distributing all the funny among two characters instead of three, and leaving a few lines on the cutting room floor) I think you'll see what I mean. Brevity is your friend.

I like the use of the omniscient narrator in this strip. That's what makes it amusing for me. But that is only my personal opinion.

I do recognize that some SC readers hate excess narration.

Stop making comics about how much you suck.

Otherwise, Go gadget go!

Thanks for all the comments and advice.

(Though I'm at a loss as to how that comic would have worked without the "Random Viewer" part. Otherwise, I understand the point about excess narration. To me, those two kids always look like they're looking at whoever's reading the comic... I'm sure I'm not the first to notice that, though.)

I don't think that first comic would have made much sense without both girls and the narration, either.

Your latest two are quite good. Some advice: Give me brevity, or... would have been improved by the addition of extra rambling dialogue for Diablo in the third panel. Give us some visual reinforcement that he's rambling, don't just tell us. In fact, if you write the dialogue well enough, you won't need to use the narration to tell us time has passed; we'll know.

I like On Brevity a lot. My only problem with it is that the first two panels are both funnier than the last one, so it kind of ends on a weak note. I don't have any better ideas to suggest, I guess I'm just saying you have to watch out for that kind of thing.

Keep 'em coming please.

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Though I'm at a loss as to how that comic would have worked without the "Random Viewer" part.

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