Hi, I just wanted to get some input. Now, the title MAY be offensive, but I really meant nothing by it, so there really is no reason for anyone to be offended.

The Comic

Link is above.

Also, keep in mind that this is the first in a series I a plan to do.

well i think they are great, but i am also new here:)

I wasn't offended, but I wasn't very entertained either. I think most of the jokes fall flat. You spend too much time on the set-up and then the punchline isn't worth it. Don't force your jokes to fill three panels if they're not that complex. If you have two jokes you can tell in one and a half panels each, then put them both into one strip. Or experiment with the "black", "splitter", and "blacker" backgrounds to simulate having more or less than three panels in your strip.

Also, learn the difference between "heroine" and "heroin".

With a little work I think you can become a decent writer. Welcome to Stripcreator.

I agree with evil_d, although I think I liked your comics more than he did. They weren't anything to write home about, but I liked them. I really liked this one
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so much I wrote home about it.

I think what _d was talking about is best exemplified in this comic:

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which would've been funnier if what Black Guy was saying wasn't just the same stuff that built up to the punchline (which had already passed). He should be saying something funny, or nothing at all.

But otherwise, your comics are pretty good. Yay!

Alright, I REALLY appreciate the input. I thank you all for any positive comments. Also, thank you for the tips evil_d...I was forcing the punchlines. I found myself staring at my screen trying to figure out what to make them say.

I hope you guys will not forget me and perhas continue to check my comics...I feel that I can do better.

Ganbatte, Yoshimitsu-kun!!!!!!

Perhaps this is harsh but I want to use it.

Yoshimitsu85 - The good thing is that, even though your punchlines need some refinement, I can see where you're going with most of them. If you stick with it, I think you'll improve. Glad to have you around.

hahahahahaha.....poop!!!!!!

haha... that's funnier than anyones comics!

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