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Chapter OneThe Mysterious Note       I got to school late that morning, because of my dentist appointment. I dreaded the dentist it was my least favourite place to go, I mean really all they do is get giant needles shove them in your mouth then yank five of your teeth out. Luckily for me it was only a check up so I felt fine straight after. Mr. Frein didn’t mind me coming late, I often did. All he’d say is it’s your education not mine, I’m not wasting my life away, you’re the one who will regret it. I hated school, it was boring and I didn’t see the point, I mean who uses algebra anyways? I just hated it. As I walked through the door of my classroom, Mr. Frein glared at me and shouted “Late again Jeremy” in a sarcastic tone so everyone could hear. “Surprised?” I answered back, no one laughed but I thought it was pretty funny. As I sat down in my chair Tony Grashfield poked me and whispered “Look at this I found it on the ground” and handed me a note. The sort of brownish grey coloured note was damp when he handed it to me which I found odd. “I do hope that is not a note you are passing around in my history class Jeremy!” Mr. Frein blared out.I glanced up and saw his bulging eyes looking at me as if they were going to fall out. I swiftly put the note in my desk and lied “Just homework” I could tell he didn’t believe me but he slowly nodded and continued with the lesson. I knew the damp note would have to wait till later or Mr. Frein would just rip it up in my face if he saw it one more time so I decided to get Tony’s attention and mouth the words “At lunch.” *   *   *        There was one minute left until the end of class and Mr. Frein approached my desk to check on my work, “Where’s all your work Mr. Kwayk” He asked me.“I’m not feeling that good today…” I lied, the real reason was I wanted to see the mysterious note and I kept imaging what it would be, maybe a girl liked me or maybe Tony was in trouble, I didn’t know but I didn’t want to do work at all. “One more time you don’t do work in class then I’ll be let your parents know, understand?” He said in a threatening voice. I nodded but was interrupted by the bell which indicated that the hour of history was over, and lunch was to begin. I rushed to my locker grabbed my lunch and coat then ran outside almost tripping over my own feet and waited near the front door. Ten minutes passed and Tony was no where to be seen. Every lunch we meet up and discuss about how our day had been but he was no where to be seen. I didn’t want to look at the note without him because he was my best friend and I felt it would be rude.Five minutes passed and there was still no sight of him. All of a sudden the note flew out of my hands on to the snowy ground making it even more wet. I bent down, picked it up and opened it to dry it but as I opened it I read the title and was glued to it. I had another look to see if Tony was anywhere to be seen, but he wasn’t so I continued to study the brownish grey note. I gasped, as my eyes glued to the note reading something that was utterly disturbing, the only thing I didn’t know was I wasn’t looking at an ordinary note I was looking at my future.  Chapter Two A Vampire?       I read the long paragraph not taking my eyes away from it once. At first I was freaked out and started to think what if this happened to me, what if I was next, it was a frightening thought and I tried not to think of it. I read the note over and over again checking that I did not miss out anything. I wouldn’t call it a note, or even a newspaper it was more like a wanted or a beware poster, it read: News Notice      A Young man has been roaming the streets of our town, but he is no ordinary person, he is an evil murderer. Over eight people have been found murdered the past two months all by the same death. On each person that has been found dead have been two large holes in there neck. Doctors say they are some sort of a bite maybe from a spider or snake. If you know a man with a pet spider or snake that you think may be the murderer contact us as soon as possible.       Remember To:                       -Lock all doors in your house                         -.Don‘t go outside after 9:00pm      If you find any information on this horrible man then call us as soon as possible at:416 782 9014Thank You…       I folded the poster and stuffed it in my coat pocket. I was scared and very freaked out. The thought of a crazy murderer running around our streets just gave me the creeps. Now I don’t usually get scared of murders or burglars but this one was different, there was always stories of murders and bad people in the news, this was something I’d never heard or seen of before, this was no average day murderer, this was a man who would go into peoples houses and come out of the house only leaving a dead body with two holes in their neck. The holes, now that was the weird thing, why would he leave two holes? How would he leave the two holes? Did he carry a killer viper around with him? The bell rang, stopping my thought and I quickly rushed to math class will still no sign of Tony. *   *   *        There was no Tony in class either and I started to get worried about him so I raised my hand and decided to asked Mr. Frein on the where about he might be. “Do you know where Tony is? He was going to meet me in the school yard but he never showed up…”“Hmmm” he stopped had a thought and continued.“Sorry, Jeremy I don’t have a clue, he was in my history class last and then he left to lunch…” I started to get worried as math dragged on. What if this murderer I read about in the note stole him just before lunch, took him away and put two holes in his neck like his other eight victims, it was a scary thought and I constantly told myself not to think that way and the he’d probably just had called his mom because he was feeling sick.  *   *   *        “Blllrriiinngg!!” The bell screeched signaling the end of a boring math class. I threw on my coat, picked up my bag and rushed out of class to go home but accidentally the note fell out my pocket right in front of Mr. Frein’s foot. He picked it up, opened it and looked inside. His eyes also widened like mine did at lunch, raising his right eyebrow he asked me “Do you… do you believe this?“I guess… why shouldn’t I?” I replied.He looked at the paper once again, examining it and then chuckle “Maybe it’s a scary Vampire”I didn’t laugh, I didn’t find it funny, I responded by saying. “A Vampire…? Aren’t you supposed to be the smart one here Mr. Frein?”He laughed and whispered “You never know…”I snatched the note out of his hand and while running out the classroom shouting out “Bye, Mr. Frein!”I was in a rush and wanted to get home so I could call Tony and see if he was feeling alright. Plus I wanted to examine the not a little more, there was something about the note that couldn’t stop me repeatable reading it over and over again.  *   *   *        I sprinted home and thought about the conversation I had with my teacher. What was he talking about I thought, of cause I didn’t believe it was a vampire, I’m not a seven year old anymore, I was fourteen, and I new very well that vampires didn’t exist, well at least that’s what I thought. Chapter ThreeA Missing Friend       I arrived home and barged through the door. I threw my backpack on the floor, hung my coat, and slipped my shoes off. My first intention was to call Tony, but that couldn’t happen because mom wanted the dog walked. I hated this, every time I’d come home from school, run up stairs turn the computer or TV on she’d shout me with in a minute and say.“Jeremy!!! The dog needs walking!”I didn’t understand, she would walk the dog for an hour every morning, so why did he need another walk. I’d always tell her just before I walked him.“His legs will fall off one day, and then you’ll regret it!” Of cause I didn’t mean this but I just wanted to get out of walking the dog. “Maaaaaaaax!” I moaned. “Time for your walk!”He jumped up at me licking my face with his long tongue which gave me a chance to quickly sling on his lead and take him out. *   *   *        Twenty Minutes passed and I was still walking the dog, I was really bored and I didn’t know where to go so I decided to go to Tony’s house and see if he wanted to walk the dog with me, that would also give us a chance to finally talk about the note.        I got to Tony’s house looked up to his room to see if his light was on but it wasn’t so I knocked on his door twice and rang the door bell three times (That was our secret knock to detect each other). No one answered, so I stepped back and shouted to see if he was in his room asleep. “Tony!”Still no one answered so I figured he was out shopping or in a deep sleep so I decided to head back home. *   *   *        I reached my house and opened my door, dangling Max behind me. I bent down to Max’s eye level, looked in his eyes and gave him a big kiss on his chubby face and took his lead off.  I through my shoes in the closet then dashed up the stairs so fast that I almost tripped up. Reaching my door I opened, then shut it with in a second. I didn’t like using the phone in public, I feel like it should be a private moment when someone talks on the phone, that’s why I shut my door whenever I use my phone. I dialed Tony’s number as fast as my skinny fingers could go, and then placed the phone against my ear. I was whispering in my head “Come on, pick up, just pick up the phone…” Suddenly, someone picked up, it was a man with a really deep voice, I asked. “Hey, Is Tony there…?”At first there was silence, and then there was a voice.“No” The man said in a rude voice.I responded by saying. “Do you know when he will be in?”Once again came the ten seconds of silence then he said.“You have the wrong number” and rudely hung up on me.I looked at the phone then placed it back on my ear and whispered. “Hello?”No one answered then a loud beeping noise came that made me jump and toss the phone half way across the room. I crawled over to the place where my phone landed and read the number I dialed in. There was the problem, I typed a three instead of a five, I must have done it be accident because I was typing the numbers in too fast. So, I typed in the number again but this time much slower, I spent time on every number checking it was the right one. Once satisfied with the number I called him and put the phone against my ear, this time expecting a better response.“Hello?” A woman asked.This time I knew it was the right number, I could tell it was Tony’s Mom by the sound of her voice.“Hey, is Tony there?” I Questioned.“No sorry, I thought he was at your house I haven’t seen him since this morning” She answered in a shocking voice.“Oh…” I didn’t know what else to say so I just put down the phone without saying goodbye.Thoughts rushed through my head as I rested the phone back on it stand. What if the murderer stole him and killed him? What if he went to the shop to buy something and a car crashed into him? I didn’t know what to think but all I knew was something strange was happening and I didn’t like it one bit. Chapter FourMrs. Grashfields Breakdown       Mash and beans was for dinner, it was cold and I didn’t really like it that much but I was forced to eat it all. As I sat at the table with Mom and Dad, I began to think about the murderer and even more about Tony, something was happening that I didn’t know about and I wanted to know, maybe Tony was working with the murderer, and he didn’t go home tonight because he was out killing people with this mysterious murderer, but that wouldn’t happen I knew Tony would never hurt any one, heck he wouldn’t hurt a fly. Then I started to think that maybe the murderer had something that Tony really wanted, like money or maybe gold, Tony’s family was very poor and needed money rather badly. A huge banging noise at the door stopped me from my endless daydreaming and made me twist my head to see who it was. Mom answered the door and at the step was a woman crying her eyes out. I couldn’t really see who it was at first because Mom was in the way but when she invited her in I soon realized it was Tony’s Mom. She looked horrible, big dark bags under her eyes as if she’d been punched in the face, her wrinkled hands were shivering as she held them against her face brushing every tear away. At first at thought she was going to tell us Tony was found dead but then she shouted out. “Where’s my little Tony!?” and then continued to cry. “I’m sure he’s just at his friends house he’ll be home soon don’t worry” Mom Said.“No! He never goes somewhere without telling me!” Mrs. Grashfield screamed out. She paused to gasp for air, still crying and blared out. “Plus I’ve spoke to everyone, friends and family, and there has been no sign of him at all since this morning!” At this point I was speechless I wanted to add into the conversation but I had nothing to say. Then Dad spoke in a positive voice. “Look, I’m sure we’ll find him, I’ll call the police right now you just sit down and rest…”My Mom nodded and helped Mrs. Grashfield sit down.I was still in shock but before I could think of anything else Dad came to me and whispered in my ear. “Head up to your room boy, I don’t think Mrs. Grashfield wants you to see her in this state…”

I tried to argue with Dad but he then bent down again and whispered in my ear in a tougher tone.

“Now or else!”I nodded and slowly walked up stairs to my room.              *   *   *        Twenty Two minutes had past on my clock and I could still hear the moans and cries from Tony’s Mom. I was fed up with waiting, so I hopped out of my bed and creaked open my door very slowly and tip toed over to my stairway. I then tried to see what they were doing but all I could see was the back of my Mom’s head while she was sitting on the couch, so I kneeled down and listened to what they had to say. “Its all right, I called the police there on there way, everything is going to be fine…” Dad said in a calm voice.

“What if that murderer took my little boy, killed him and dumped him in a river! What if...”

Before Mrs. Grashfield could finish my mom interrupted her and said in a comforting voice. “Now, let’s not be silly here, it’s only seven o’clock, it’s just getting dark, and if this murderer does exist I doubt he would have taken your son in the daylight…”“Hmm…” Mrs. Grashfield grumbled then nodded.The next minute was filled with a deathly silence, no noise was heard at all but that was ended by another banging noise at the door. I quickly stood up and watched the door praying it was Tony, my Mom ran to the door, probably hoping it was Tony as well. The door swung open and I saw my Mom sigh, it wasn’t Tony, it was the police asking if they could come in and ask some questions about Tony. The Two policemen came in one fat and small with a donut in his right hand, and the other a tall man with a mustache who looked more professional then the other one. After the police came in I decided to go to bed, I was tired which was unusual, it had been a rough and very strange day, from finding out there was a deranged murderer in our town, to the odd disappearance of my best friend Tony. I lay in bed thinking about tomorrow, would I ever see Tony again? I asked myself, I hoped so, I bet he got lost and he’s probably just finding his way back, he’ll be here in the morning, at least I hoped. I rubbed my eyes tiredly and made one last prayer.“Dear God, please, please, please, let Tony still be alive, please let me see him again…”I ended the prayer and fell asleep ten minutes after it, not knowing that, that prayer would come true but in a way that I thought would never be humanly possible. Chapter FiveTony’s Assembly          I woke up that morning feeling happy and refreshed, I got up put my best shirt on, jeans, and washed my hair, and then I suddenly remembered about Tony, and began to become sad again.            “Jam on your toast, dear?” Mom asked“Yes Please…” I mumbled.She then came over to me and put her arm around me.“Tony’s going to be fine, w…”Before my Mom could finish her sentence I smiled and asked.“You found him!” Then looking at her reaction I could tell the answer was a no.“Well, no…, but the police are looking for him don’t worry we’ll find him soon…” She said in a sort of nervous voice. She gave me a big kiss that made me blush, and then walked away to make my breakfast, Mom didn’t make breakfast much but when she did it was amazing.        “Bye…” I shouted out to my Mom as I was just shutting the front door to leave to school. “Have a great day…” She responded. I stroked my dogs head and then closed the door quietly so Dad wouldn’t hear. Dad likes it to be quiet in the morning so he can read his boring Newspaper! *   *   *        I arrived at school, but this time early, I opened the rusty school door and headed to my locker on second floor.After I put my coat in my locker I headed to history, but was stopped in my tracks when an announcement asked all students to report to the gym immediately, so I swiftly turned around and rushed to the gym to see what was going on.       I entered the gym, and it was packed, every student in the school was there, so I had to find a bad seat at the back where I could hardly see.“Good Morning Students, I have called you down here for a sad announcement” Our Principle (Mr. Polziko) said. Then I realized what he was talking about, Tony.“A young boy in ninth grade has gone missing, his name is Tony Grashfield he is tall, has short brown hair and has green eyes…” He looked down then proceeded to talk.“If you have any information please tell me as soon as possible so we can find this young boy…” I looked around and people everywhere were whispering to each other and gasping, some were even crying! “That’s all I have to say, now go to your classes, Thank you…” Mr. Polziko mumbled, and then quickly walked out as if he was going to crying.We all stood up and everyone began to talk about Tony asking questions like, where do you think he is? And do you think that murderer killed him?I quickly rushed out the gym I needed some fresh air. I ran outside and kneeled down on my knees. I picked up some snow from the ground examined it and then rubbed the freezing snow all in my face hoping it would wake me from this terrible dream, but those was no dream this was reality. My face started to feel really numb and I didn’t like the feeling so I brushed all the snow of my face, looked to the sky and screamed out.“Tony!!!”I listened out for an answer and the only answer I got was my echo screaming back at me ten times quieter each time. So, I brought myself to a standing position and stood there for a minute gazing out into the clouds until finally I headed to class, leaving only the tears from my eyes on the snowy ground. Chapter SixThe Stairway to Hell       My class ended, and I slowly stood up, grabbed my bag, put it on my back and left the classroom to head to my locker with still no sign of Tony. Once at my locker, I opened it, grabbed my coat, shut it, and left the school, heading home.  

      To my surprise, when I walked out the school I saw my Mom in our red van, I ran over to see her to see if there was any update on the disappearance of Tony. There wasn’t, unfortunately, so I opened the door threw my bag in, sat down, then slammed the door shut using all my anger and sorrow that it almost fell into little tiny pieces on the floor, then my Mom road off. Mom knew not to talk to me in the car, as she could tell I was angry because no one could find my best friend Tony, so she was smart and kept quiet. I broke the silence by telling her about the note he gave me. She said that it had been all over the news and wasn’t surprised that I found out.

“You don’t really believe that he’s a Vampire do you? She questioned as I told her what my teacher said.

“Of cause not” I replied back unconfidently but then asked another question.

“Then what do you think are the two holes that this murderer leaves on his victim’s neck?”

“I think it’s a lie just to get everyone aware that this murderer is dangerous, you know what the media is like these days, they make anything up so people will believe them and be shocked…”

My Mom said in a rather smart voice.

I wanted to believe what she said so I just nodded but a part of me wanted to believe that it was a vampire just to make it that more interesting. *   *   *             The Ride home took about ten minutes and once we arrived home I kicked the car door open, grabbed my bag, pushed the door shut and ran inside my house. Mom followed carrying two bags of heavy groceries in both hands not bothering to ask if I could help.        Ten Minutes passed and Mom shouted out.“Jeremy! Come and walk the dog” I was outraged how could she make me walk the dog under these circumstances, I mean my best friend is missing and she wants me to walk a pathetic dog. I leaped downstairs looked at my Mom with the most evil look I have ever gave her and screamed.“No!” I paused then continued. “I don’t even like that stupid dog! Get rid of it!”

“Go straight to your room right now, don’t ever speak to me like that again!” she barked.

“I hate you!” I screamed and walked over to the stairs with my arms tightly crossed. As I stomped up stairs, trying to make as much loud as I could when each foot slammed against a step, a tear began to roll from her eye, she loved me so much, she wanted the best for me, and I didn’t care one bit, I was a teenager, and from now on I was going to do whatever I wanted when I liked. *   *   *         I spent the night in my room, thinking about Tony, where would he be? It had been thirty five grueling hours since someone had seen him and everyone was starting to think we would never see him again. I didn’t like to think that, never seeing him again, scared me, he was like a brother to me, If I never saw him again I don’t see how I could live anymore. I’d probably crawl up in a tiny ball in a corner and die.       *   *   *             I woke up at 3:26am and all I could think of was food, my stomach was grumbling intensely and I had to do something about it (Mom didn’t let me out of my room last night, so I couldn’t eat dinner). I stayed in bed for ten more minutes thinking about Tony and if he was safe at home yet. I called his cell phone yet no one answered which either meant he wasn’t found yet or he was fast asleep. I had to leap out of bed and go down to get some food because my hunger was so unbearable. So I picked up my cloths which were all scattered across the floor and walked over to my door. I opened my door as quiet as possible and went to the stairway, and then tip toed to the steps and proceeded down very slowly, trying not to make any noise at all. The front door was unlocked which was unusual, I figured Mom and Dad forget last night because Tony was on their minds and I was being a pain. I felt rather bad on what had happened with me and my Mom. I didn’t mean to moan at her like that but she should know not to ask me to walk a dog when my best friend is missing. I walked over to the door and twisted the lock on it, then creped to the kitchen, it was pitch black, so I searched for the light for a second then found It, I flicked it on, then turned around, the light burned my eyes like it always does in the morning, so I rubbed my eyes until I could see properly, then my heart started to beat ten times faster then normal, I wished that I hadn’t of turned the lights on because the sight in front of me almost gave me a heart attack, I gasped for air and almost fainted, I didn’t care about hunger anymore and Tony was taken right of my mind. Nothing could prepare me for what was in front of my eyes it was truly Hell! Chapter SevenHell 

      Blood was smeared all over the walls, the sought of smell of a dead animal, I plugged my noise and looked in astonishment when I saw my Dad in the corner of the kitchen. He must off fell asleep in the kitchen which was rather odd but when I got closer I realized that that wasn’t the case. His neck was broken with blood all around it, a huge bruise on his head, nose broken, it looked like he slipped or fell, but not until I got really close did I notice that there was two huge fang holes in his neck, he had been brutally murdered like the other eight people, and was now dead. I bent down and looked at his lifeless body, I gave him a kiss on the cheek and mouthed the words.

“I love you Dad…”

A poodle began to form on the floor from the tears from my eyes, I was in so much shock that I didn’t know what to do. I rushed in the living room to get the phone and call police. Thankfully I saw Max in the corner and he looked fine absolutely sound asleep, with his feet up in the air as if he was running in his dream. I sat on the sofa scared to move one muscle, I pinched myself to see if I was in a dream, it was no dream, this was very real. I laid back, and stretched, but suddenly I felt something under me. The phone dropped from my hand and hit the ground with a loud bang. I noticed that I was laying down on something that felt very uncomfortable. I jumped up terrified to look at what I just laid on. It was only my Mom, I thought she was asleep as well, until I turned the lights on and found the same two fang holes in her neck. Blood was all over her as well, her eyes were wide open, it was like I was watching a horror movie. I closed her eyes and whispered in the ear of my Mom.

“Sorry for being a bad kid…” I a breath and whipped the tear from my eye, then continued.

“I’ll take care of Max, I love you!” I gave her a kiss on the cheek and I warm hug not letting go for two minutes. I then stepped back and hit my back on something, I quickly darted around and hit it as hard as I could, throwing right and left punches, I opened my eyes slowly, hoping it was not the mysterious murderer. It wasn’t, thankfully, it was the wall in our living room. Angered and confused I rushed to the phone to dial 911, but before I could get there I heard a hug smash upstairs, followed by a door slamming. Silence followed the sudden sounds, after a minute I then proceeded to call 911. They took forever to pick up, but when they did, a woman’s voice answered the phone.“Hello, are you in trouble?” The woman asked.“YES, YES…ERR, I THINK THERES A MURDER, HERE, IN MY HOUSE!” I responded in a terrified voice.“We’ll, get the police there right away to help you… stay calm” The Woman tried to make me feel better by telling me to calm down but it wasn’t working, nothing could make me feel better at the moment, due to what had happened to me the past two days.

“My Mom an…” Suddenly, a wrinkly hand came over my mouth, preventing me from finish my sentence to the woman. I then found myself been dragged across the carpet by this mysterious person, his right hand over my mouth and his left hand tight around my neck. He dragged me to the kitchen then slung me against the dishwasher, my back hitting it hard. I looked at him, as he grinned evilly at me and whispered.

“Hello little boy!”

 “What do you want? Leave me alone!” I shouted out at him crying.“You’re Blood!” He chuckled in an evil tone. He was wearing black tight pants and had some sort of grayish black gown on, his hands were as wrinkly as his face looked horrible. He had brown hair stretching over his eye, a little goatee and big dark bags under his red eyes. His pants were ripped at the knees with blood on them, and on his chin were spots of red blood. “YOU… YOU IDIOT!” I was still very scared of what he was going to do next. He was very tall so when he was standing right over me he looked like a giant tower.“Come on… I didn’t kill your dog…yet…!” He laughed in a menacing voice, I just wanted to stand up and punch him right in the face but I couldn’t, I didn’t have the guts. He then bent down to my eye level and whispered in my ear.“How’s…Tony?”

I had enough of him now, he murdered my Mom, my Dad and possibly my best friend Tony, I wasn’t going to take this anymore so I quickly pushed him out of the way and dived for our kitchen knife beside the sink. He fell back on the floor, in shock, and then shouted.

“Go on, do it Jeremy! Kill me!” I paused for a minute thinking how did he know my name, I then pushed all my thoughts aside and ran up to him, eyes closed, holding the knife in my right hand ready to bring it down on him. As I swung the knife at his body, he suddenly turned into dark smoke, and I tripped and fell almost cutting myself with the knife. I was now against the garbage can in our kitchen with the knife in my hand shaking like a rattle snakes tail. I looked around the room carefully with my eyes to check if he was still here. I slowly stood up and he was no where to be seen, just as I thought I scared him away I heard this loud swoosh sound behind me, I twisted and there he was with smoke around his whole body. He then kicked the knife out of my hand sending it half way across the room.“What know, Mr. Kwayk?” He asked me, while grinning. I didn’t know what to do I stepped back slowly but then he pulled me against his body and placed too cold blooded hands on my neck. He then began to rub the large vein on the side of my neck very soft and slowly licking his large lips. At this point I was kind of freaked out and I asked.“Who ar…”  But before I could finish he placed when dirty finger on my lip and whispered.“Shhhh…” “My name is Mr. Frapino…” He paused then continued.“I am…A VAMPIRE!” He laughed.Still stroking my neck he slowly started to come closer as if he was going to bite me. A vampire I thought to myself, they don’t exist he’s lying, but I soon realized he was telling the truth when he through me to the ground and opened his mouth, allowing me to see his huge fangs. He then came down on me, fangs first, aiming for the purple vein on my neck. I quickly moved my neck out the way and his face smacked against the hard wooden floor. I then reached out to the knife near the chair, picked it up and without and hesitation used all my anger and frustration and placed it in his spine.“Arrrrrggghhhh!” He screamed. He stood up trying to get the knife out of his back, he started to walk around the kitchen in a circle for thirty seconds trying to get it out, I found it funny and started t laugh, but my laughter suddenly stopped when he twisted his head round and looked at me, with his blood shot eyes. He then grinned and said.

“I’m a vampire, not a human this pathetic knife can’t kill me, only a wooden stake through the heart can kill me!” He chuckled. He then used all of his strength to take the knife out, he tugged and tugged until the bloody knife immerged from his boney back. He then threw it on the ground, dark red blood smeared all over it. He then turned around to show me his back, I could see the place where the knife stabbed him, there was tons of blood flowing out splattering all over the floor around him. So he quickly flexed all his muscles and suddenly I began to see his skin roll over the open sore, and with in seconds his back looked as good as new. He then pounced to the ground slurping up all the blood he’d lost until there was none left. He then looked up at me, grinned, and chuckled.

“Any last words before you die Je…” but before he could finish his deathly sentence the door made a large sound.“BANG, BANG, BANG!” We both glanced over, curious on whom it was. The door then flung open and the police that I called were here finally.“POLICE!” The policemen shouted out as they came running through the hallway turning lights on pointing there guns everywhere. I glanced over to see the murderer (or now known as Mr. Frapino the vampire), and he was no where to be seen. I then looked over to the kitchen window and it was broken, glass everywhere. He probably leaped out the window and sprinted away into the dark night. The police then came in the kitchen and pointed a gun at me ready to shoot until he realized I was just a kid. He looked over and saw my Dad in the corner, dead. The five men walked over and checked his pulse making sure he was dead. They all nodded to each other then proceeded to collect the two dead bodies in the house and take them outside. It was good the police came because if they were to come any later I would have been dead with two large fang holes in my neck.  *   *   *       The police were, still in my house looking around for clues, and I was still in the same position that the vampire left me in. I hated my life now, no Tony, no Mom and no Dad, all I had was my dog Max, who didn’t witness anything he was still snoozing in his crate. I crawled over to the knife that I stabbed Mr. Frapino with, and examined it. The police were all upstairs and I was on my own so in frustration I cut my left arm with the knife. I made a slit in my arm, and blood was already dripping from it, I quickly stood up grabbed a towel and rapped it around my bleeding arm. Back then, I thought me just cutting myself with a knife was a good choice, that it would make me feel less pain, but I was wrong, that was the worse decision I had ever made, and it changed my life forever.     Chapter EightThe Hospital       I lay in the hospital bed that morning thinking, where did I go wrong? Why did I have to deserve this? Why me? The nurse came in and stroked the hair out of my eyes and said.“Everything’s going to be fine…”No it wasn’t, I said to myself, is this women crazy? Does she have a brain? Obviously not because I just lost my Mom, Dad and maybe Tony, so the answer was no, not everything was going to be fine.  *   *   *      Two days passed, and I was still in this stupid hospital. Everywhere was white, it smelled like an old people home, and I wanted to leave as soon as possible, but the doctors and nurses wouldn’t let me leave because I had no where to go and they were still waiting on the blood tests to return. I began to think about my Mom and Dad, and how much they loved me. Then I remembered the last thing I said to them, and a tear rolled from my eye, down my cheek, and on to the bed. If I could go back in time I would have told them that I loved them so much and that I would always love them for as long as I lived, but I couldn’t do that now, I had to stick with the fact that the last impression I left with them was a terrible one.      I glanced over to the door seeing it creek open and a doctor peeked though, and then came walking in.“How are you?” He asked in a cheerful voice.Al I had to do was look at him, and he could tell by the expression on my face that I wasn’t that good.“Oh, I see…” He sneezed then continued.“Well, I have a surprise for you…” He twisted his body and shouted.“Come on Max!”Max ran through the door, looked around the room then saw me, he suddenly jumped up at me and licked me all over my face. Normal I wasn’t that happy to see Max, but he was the only part of my family left so I was overjoyed when I saw him. “Now, seen as the situation you are in, Jeremy, we decided to let the dog stay here with you” I smiled up at the doctor and mumbled.“Thanks…” *   *   *       Another day passed and I was still in this horrible hospital, I thought about just leaving but I couldn’t, the doctors would check up on me every five minutes to see if I was alright. I glanced over to my wrist where I had cut my self four days ago and it was completely healed, I found this strange because when I usually get a cut it stays there for a month or so then disappears, but with this one it only lasted four days, maybe not even that, this was the first time I’d seen it since I cut it. There was no sign of it anywhere, no little cut, nothing, I glanced over to my other arm checking I had the right one and I did, the other arm had nothing on it as well.       The nurse came in and asked if everything was alright and I nodded, as she was just about to leave, I remembered something and quickly shouted out.“Wait!”She turned around and walked back up to my bed and said. “Yes?”“When you examined me the night I came in here was there any injuries on me, for example a cut?” I asked in a curious voice.“No, nothing, you were spotless”I looked at her confused and then after ten seconds of looking her dead in the eye I nodded. She raised her eyebrow at me shook her head and left the room. As soon as she left I sat up and examined my arm again, still there was no cut there, I remember fully that I cut myself that night, so there was no doubt that I didn’t cut myself. I began to think maybe it was the knife, maybe I cut myself and I imagined the blood coming out, but that couldn’t have happened because I also stabbed the vampire in the back with the same knife, and tons of blood was flowing out of his body, then he licked it up off the floor. The thought of him licking up the blood made me pull a sort of sickly face, and made me want to be sick, but luckily that feeling went away, and I laid down again. I looked up at the plain ceiling thinking what could it be? How could a deep sore go away with in one night? And then it came to me, the reason It went away so fast was because I was a VAMPIRE! I forgot to wipe the knife after it had been used for stabbing Mr. Frapino the vampire, therefore his blood was still on the knife, so when I cut my self the blood from the knife went into the blood in my arm, that’s why the bloody cut went away that night, because my skin rolled over it just like the vampires skin did with his cut in his back. Now I had vampires blood flowing through my body, and I was not a human any more I was a blood sucking VAMPIRE! Chapter NineGaining Powers       I began to see what was happening One minute before it actually happened, like for example, the other day I was lying down in my bed and saw in my head a doctor walking through the door and Max running up to him and jumping up at him. A minute later, that exact scene happened, but not in my head in real life. This came very useful to me, because I could see something in my head, then make sure it didn’t happen in real life, it was pretty cool. I guessed the murderer used this skill when I first tried to swing the knife at him and he vanished into black smoke. Then I remembered about the murdering vampire, Mr. Frapino, and remembered that he hadn’t been caught yet, he was still out somewhere plotting for his next kill. I had to get revenge, I had to get payback, so I made a goal that by the end of the week I would meet him, get Tony back wherever he was and kill Mr. Frapino. I figured he was keeping Tony trapped somewhere, by the way he said to me ‘How’s Tony?’ and I also figured that the only reason he was keeping Tony was because Tony was the only person I had left that I cared about, a part from Max, and he knew that I would do anything to get him back, and to be honest I would, but the only thing I didn’t understand was why did he want me? Why does he want me to come to him? What was so great about my Blood? This I didn’t know.  *   *   *            For the next few days, I found out new powers I could do with the vampire’s blood swirling around in my body. I could now speak in five different languages, I could pick up stuff that I couldn’t before, for example last Thursday I was bored so I hoped out of bed and started to use the bed as a weight for my right hand, I could pick the bed up with my right hand toss it over to my left hand without any difficulty at all. I began to see through walls and I started to grow little fangs in my mouth.             I started to get bored, and I hadn’t seen Mom and Dad since last week. So I was in really bad need of a picture of them together, that’s when I knew I had to get out of this place, who knew how long I’d be in here for it smelt horrible, the food taste like it hadn’t even been cooked, and I wasn’t allowed to get up out of my bed without a nurse without me. So I decided that I was just going to leave for an hour to grab some pictures from home. So there it was, decided, I was going to leave tomorrow night for an hour then return (I wanted it to be at night because no nurses or doctors check on me at night, so I wouldn’t get caught!). My mind was made up, so I turned over and decided to have a little nap. I fell asleep with in five minutes, not knowing that tomorrow night I was going to find out something that would make me cry, even harder then I did when I lost my Mom and Dad.   Chapter TenThe Departure       My blood tests came back and the doctor asked if he could speak to me in private, and I agreed. He closed the door, shut the curtains and then pulled up a chair next to my bed to talk to me. “Now, Jeremy, how are you?” The doctor asked.“Ok… I guess?” as soon as I answered his question he started to jot down what I just said on a piece of paper, I tried to look what it said, but his hand was over the writing.“Are you feeling any different then usual?” “No” I lied, I felt better then normal actually, I could see and hear better then normal, and the new powers I had gained felt great.“Well, we received your blood tests and…” He stopped for a second then continued.“…We have never seen anything like it before…”  He then stood up and grabbed a little flash light and mumbled. “Open your mouth, please…” I was just about to open my mouth but then remembered about my new fangs that had grown in my mouth, if he saw them he might think I was the murderer, so I shook my head and said.“No”He looked at me for a second, and then said.“Come on… let’s not be silly now… open wide!”Once again I shook my head and told him no

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Mr. Wonderful

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You really need to break that up into paragraphs.

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Legend, oh legend, the third wheel legend...always in the way.

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masturbating to Japanese shit porn

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replace all the nouns with "spaghetti" and you'll have gold.

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Ham-fisted ham fisting.

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Riding through your town with his head on fire

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I have not read the whole thing, because it's very long and doesn't have nearly enough paragraph breaks.  Plus, it appears to have been cut off before the end.  But here is some advice based on what I did read.

 

1.  The dialogue isn't believable.   It's transparently calculated to have a certain effect on the reader, either to evoke an emotion or to lead their train of thought in a certain direction.  But it's not what real people would really say in such a situation.  Try this: whenever you need a line of dialogue, imagine yourself in the character's situation, speaking to people you know, and ask yourself what you would say, if this were real.  If the role is too much of a stretch for you, then imagine what your mother, or your best friend, etc., would say.

 

2.  Many of the sentences are run-ons.  As an exercise, try going through and chopping up sentences so that each one contains only one or two clauses.  (A "clause" is a part of a sentence that has a subject and a verb and could stand on its own, grammatically, as a complete sentence.)  Here's an example:

could become

Shorter sentences are easier to read, and in a suspense-driven story like this one, they can also help to establish a tense, quick-moving atmosphere.

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The what mentioned above is total fiction. Please don't take it seriously!

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FinnNYC
germs

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...also, see if you can edit it down to a three panel comic.

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The Return

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thanks for the advice guys, it turned out quite wierd when i copyied and pasted it not as planned. but thanks!

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The Return

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Chapter One The Mysterious Note     

  I got to school late that morning, because of my dentist appointment. I dreaded the dentist it was my least favourite place to go, I mean really all they do is get giant needles shove them in your mouth then yank five of your teeth out. Luckily for me it was only a check up so I felt fine straight after. Mr. Frein didn’t mind me coming late, I often did. All he’d say is it’s your education not mine, I’m not wasting my life away, you’re the one who will regret it. I hated school, it was boring and I didn’t see the point, I mean who uses algebra anyways? I just hated it. As I walked through the door of my classroom, Mr. Frein glared at me and shouted “Late again Jeremy” in a sarcastic tone so everyone could hear. “Surprised?” I answered back, no one laughed but I thought it was pretty funny. As I sat down in my chair Tony Grashfield poked me and whispered “Look at this I found it on the ground” and handed me a note. The sort of brownish grey coloured note was damp when he handed it to me which I found odd. “I do hope that is not a note you are passing around in my history class Jeremy!” Mr. Frein blared out.I glanced up and saw his bulging eyes looking at me as if they were going to fall out. I swiftly put the note in my desk and lied “Just homework” I could tell he didn’t believe me but he slowly nodded and continued with the lesson. I knew the damp note would have to wait till later or Mr. Frein would just rip it up in my face if he saw it one more time so I decided to get Tony’s attention and mouth the words “At lunch.” 

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    There was one minute left until the end of class and Mr. Frein approached my desk to check on my work, “Where’s all your work Mr. Kwayk” He asked me.“I’m not feeling that good today…” I lied, the real reason was I wanted to see the mysterious note and I kept imaging what it would be, maybe a girl liked me or maybe Tony was in trouble, I didn’t know but I didn’t want to do work at all. “One more time you don’t do work in class then I’ll be let your parents know, understand?” He said in a threatening voice. I nodded but was interrupted by the bell which indicated that the hour of history was over, and lunch was to begin. I rushed to my locker grabbed my lunch and coat then ran outside almost tripping over my own feet and waited near the front door. Ten minutes passed and Tony was no where to be seen. Every lunch we meet up and discuss about how our day had been but he was no where to be seen. I didn’t want to look at the note without him because he was my best friend and I felt it would be rude.Five minutes passed and there was still no sight of him. All of a sudden the note flew out of my hands on to the snowy ground making it even more wet. I bent down, picked it up and opened it to dry it but as I opened it I read the title and was glued to it. I had another look to see if Tony was anywhere to be seen, but he wasn’t so I continued to study the brownish grey note. I gasped, as my eyes glued to the note reading something that was utterly disturbing, the only thing I didn’t know was I wasn’t looking at an ordinary note I was looking at my future. 

 Chapter Two A Vampire?    

   I read the long paragraph not taking my eyes away from it once. At first I was freaked out and started to think what if this happened to me, what if I was next, it was a frightening thought and I tried not to think of it. I read the note over and over again checking that I did not miss out anything. I wouldn’t call it a note, or even a newspaper it was more like a wanted or a beware poster, it read:

 Notice      A Young man has been roaming the streets of our town, but he is no ordinary person, he is an evil murderer. Over eight people have been found murdered the past two months all by the same death. On each person that has been found dead have been two large holes in there neck. Doctors say they are some sort of a bite maybe from a spider or snake. If you know a man with a pet spider or snake that you think may be the murderer contact us as soon as possible.       

Remember To:                      

-Lock all doors in your house                        

-.Don‘t go outside after 9:00pm     

 If you find any information on this horrible man then call us as soon as possible at:416 782 9014 Thank You…  

     I folded the poster and stuffed it in my coat pocket. I was scared and very freaked out. The thought of a crazy murderer running around our streets just gave me the creeps. Now I don’t usually get scared of murders or burglars but this one was different, there was always stories of murders and bad people in the news, this was something I’d never heard or seen of before, this was no average day murderer, this was a man who would go into peoples houses and come out of the house only leaving a dead body with two holes in their neck. The holes, now that was the weird thing, why would he leave two holes? How would he leave the two holes? Did he carry a killer viper around with him? The bell rang, stopping my thought and I quickly rushed to math class will still no sign of Tony. 

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 There was no Tony in class either and I started to get worried about him so I raised my hand and decided to asked Mr. Frein on the where about he might be. “Do you know where Tony is? He was going to meet me in the school yard but he never showed up…”“Hmmm” he stopped had a thought and continued.“Sorry, Jeremy I don’t have a clue, he was in my history class last and then he left to lunch…” I started to get worried as math dragged on. What if this murderer I read about in the note stole him just before lunch, took him away and put two holes in his neck like his other eight victims, it was a scary thought and I constantly told myself not to think that way and the he’d probably just had called his mom because he was feeling sick.  

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   “Blllrriiinngg!!” The bell screeched signaling the end of a boring math class. I threw on my coat, picked up my bag and rushed out of class to go home but accidentally the note fell out my pocket right in front of Mr. Frein’s foot. He picked it up, opened it and looked inside. His eyes also widened like mine did at lunch, raising his right eyebrow he asked me “Do you… do you believe this?“I guess… why shouldn’t I?” I replied.He looked at the paper once again, examining it and then chuckle “Maybe it’s a scary Vampire”I didn’t laugh, I didn’t find it funny, I responded by saying. “A Vampire…? Aren’t you supposed to be the smart one here Mr. Frein?”He laughed and whispered “You never know…”I snatched the note out of his hand and while running out the classroom shouting out “Bye, Mr. Frein!”I was in a rush and wanted to get home so I could call Tony and see if he was feeling alright. Plus I wanted to examine the not a little more, there was something about the note that couldn’t stop me repeatable reading it over and over again.  

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 I sprinted home and thought about the conversation I had with my teacher. What was he talking about I thought, of cause I didn’t believe it was a vampire, I’m not a seven year old anymore, I was fourteen, and I new very well that vampires didn’t exist, well at least that’s what I thought. 

Chapter Three A Missing Friend  

     I arrived home and barged through the door. I threw my backpack on the floor, hung my coat, and slipped my shoes off. My first intention was to call Tony, but that couldn’t happen because mom wanted the dog walked. I hated this, every time I’d come home from school, run up stairs turn the computer or TV on she’d shout me with in a minute and say.“Jeremy!!! The dog needs walking!”I didn’t understand, she would walk the dog for an hour every morning, so why did he need another walk. I’d always tell her just before I walked him.“His legs will fall off one day, and then you’ll regret it!” Of cause I didn’t mean this but I just wanted to get out of walking the dog. “Maaaaaaaax!” I moaned. “Time for your walk!”He jumped up at me licking my face with his long tongue which gave me a chance to quickly sling on his lead and take him out. 

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 Twenty Minutes passed and I was still walking the dog, I was really bored and I didn’t know where to go so I decided to go to Tony’s house and see if he wanted to walk the dog with me, that would also give us a chance to finally talk about the note.       

I got to Tony’s house looked up to his room to see if his light was on but it wasn’t so I knocked on his door twice and rang the door bell three times (That was our secret knock to detect each other). No one answered, so I stepped back and shouted to see if he was in his room asleep. “Tony!”Still no one answered so I figured he was out shopping or in a deep sleep so I decided to head back home. 

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     I reached my house and opened my door, dangling Max behind me. I bent down to Max’s eye level, looked in his eyes and gave him a big kiss on his chubby face and took his lead off.  I through my shoes in the closet then dashed up the stairs so fast that I almost tripped up. Reaching my door I opened, then shut it with in a second. I didn’t like using the phone in public, I feel like it should be a private moment when someone talks on the phone, that’s why I shut my door whenever I use my phone. I dialed Tony’s number as fast as my skinny fingers could go, and then placed the phone against my ear. I was whispering in my head “Come on, pick up, just pick up the phone…” Suddenly, someone picked up, it was a man with a really deep voice, I asked. “Hey, Is Tony there…?”At first there was silence, and then there was a voice.“No” The man said in a rude voice.I responded by saying. “Do you know when he will be in?”Once again came the ten seconds of silence then he said.“You have the wrong number” and rudely hung up on me.I looked at the phone then placed it back on my ear and whispered. “Hello?”No one answered then a loud beeping noise came that made me jump and toss the phone half way across the room. I crawled over to the place where my phone landed and read the number I dialed in. There was the problem, I typed a three instead of a five, I must have done it be accident because I was typing the numbers in too fast. So, I typed in the number again but this time much slower, I spent time on every number checking it was the right one. Once satisfied with the number I called him and put the phone against my ear, this time expecting a better response.“Hello?” A woman asked.This time I knew it was the right number, I could tell it was Tony’s Mom by the sound of her voice.“Hey, is Tony there?” I Questioned.“No sorry, I thought he was at your house I haven’t seen him since this morning” She answered in a shocking voice.“Oh…” I didn’t know what else to say so I just put down the phone without saying goodbye.Thoughts rushed through my head as I rested the phone back on it stand. What if the murderer stole him and killed him? What if he went to the shop to buy something and a car crashed into him? I didn’t know what to think but all I knew was something strange was happening and I didn’t like it one bit.

 Chapter Four Mrs. Grashfields Breakdown    

   Mash and beans was for dinner, it was cold and I didn’t really like it that much but I was forced to eat it all. As I sat at the table with Mom and Dad, I began to think about the murderer and even more about Tony, something was happening that I didn’t know about and I wanted to know, maybe Tony was working with the murderer, and he didn’t go home tonight because he was out killing people with this mysterious murderer, but that wouldn’t happen I knew Tony would never hurt any one, heck he wouldn’t hurt a fly. Then I started to think that maybe the murderer had something that Tony really wanted, like money or maybe gold, Tony’s family was very poor and needed money rather badly. A huge banging noise at the door stopped me from my endless daydreaming and made me twist my head to see who it was. Mom answered the door and at the step was a woman crying her eyes out. I couldn’t really see who it was at first because Mom was in the way but when she invited her in I soon realized it was Tony’s Mom. She looked horrible, big dark bags under her eyes as if she’d been punched in the face, her wrinkled hands were shivering as she held them against her face brushing every tear away. At first at thought she was going to tell us Tony was found dead but then she shouted out. “Where’s my little Tony!?” and then continued to cry. “I’m sure he’s just at his friends house he’ll be home soon don’t worry” Mom Said.“No! He never goes somewhere without telling me!” Mrs. Grashfield screamed out. She paused to gasp for air, still crying and blared out. “Plus I’ve spoke to everyone, friends and family, and there has been no sign of him at all since this morning!” At this point I was speechless I wanted to add into the conversation but I had nothing to say. Then Dad spoke in a positive voice. “Look, I’m sure we’ll find him, I’ll call the police right now you just sit down and rest…”My Mom nodded and helped Mrs. Grashfield sit down.I was still in shock but before I could think of anything else Dad came to me and whispered in my ear. “Head up to your room boy, I don’t think Mrs. Grashfield wants you to see her in this state…”

I tried to argue with Dad but he then bent down again and whispered in my ear in a tougher tone.

“Now or else!”I nodded and slowly walked up stairs to my room.           

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   Twenty Two minutes had past on my clock and I could still hear the moans and cries from Tony’s Mom. I was fed up with waiting, so I hopped out of my bed and creaked open my door very slowly and tip toed over to my stairway. I then tried to see what they were doing but all I could see was the back of my Mom’s head while she was sitting on the couch, so I kneeled down and listened to what they had to say. “Its all right, I called the police there on there way, everything is going to be fine…” Dad said in a calm voice.

“What if that murderer took my little boy, killed him and dumped him in a river! What if...”

Before Mrs. Grashfield could finish my mom interrupted her and said in a comforting voice. “Now, let’s not be silly here, it’s only seven o’clock, it’s just getting dark, and if this murderer does exist I doubt he would have taken your son in the daylight…”“Hmm…” Mrs. Grashfield grumbled then nodded.The next minute was filled with a deathly silence, no noise was heard at all but that was ended by another banging noise at the door. I quickly stood up and watched the door praying it was Tony, my Mom ran to the door, probably hoping it was Tony as well. The door swung open and I saw my Mom sigh, it wasn’t Tony, it was the police asking if they could come in and ask some questions about Tony. The Two policemen came in one fat and small with a donut in his right hand, and the other a tall man with a mustache who looked more professional then the other one. After the police came in I decided to go to bed, I was tired which was unusual, it had been a rough and very strange day, from finding out there was a deranged murderer in our town, to the odd disappearance of my best friend Tony. I lay in bed thinking about tomorrow, would I ever see Tony again? I asked myself, I hoped so, I bet he got lost and he’s probably just finding his way back, he’ll be here in the morning, at least I hoped. I rubbed my eyes tiredly and made one last prayer.“Dear God, please, please, please, let Tony still be alive, please let me see him again…”I ended the prayer and fell asleep ten minutes after it, not knowing that, that prayer would come true but in a way that I thought would never be humanly possible. 

Chapter Five Tony’s Assembly      

    I woke up that morning feeling happy and refreshed, I got up put my best shirt on, jeans, and washed my hair, and then I suddenly remembered about Tony, and began to become sad again.        

    “Jam on your toast, dear?” Mom asked“Yes Please…” I mumbled.She then came over to me and put her arm around me.“Tony’s going to be fine, w…”Before my Mom could finish her sentence I smiled and asked.“You found him!” Then looking at her reaction I could tell the answer was a no.“Well, no…, but the police are looking for him don’t worry we’ll find him soon…” She said in a sort of nervous voice. She gave me a big kiss that made me blush, and then walked away to make my breakfast, Mom didn’t make breakfast much but when she did it was amazing.     

   “Bye…” I shouted out to my Mom as I was just shutting the front door to leave to school. “Have a great day…” She responded. I stroked my dogs head and then closed the door quietly so Dad wouldn’t hear. Dad likes it to be quiet in the morning so he can read his boring Newspaper! 

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     I arrived at school, but this time early, I opened the rusty school door and headed to my locker on second floor.After I put my coat in my locker I headed to history, but was stopped in my tracks when an announcement asked all students to report to the gym immediately, so I swiftly turned around and rushed to the gym to see what was going on.       I entered the gym, and it was packed, every student in the school was there, so I had to find a bad seat at the back where I could hardly see.“Good Morning Students, I have called you down here for a sad announcement” Our Principle (Mr. Polziko) said. Then I realized what he was talking about, Tony.“A young boy in ninth grade has gone missing, his name is Tony Grashfield he is tall, has short brown hair and has green eyes…” He looked down then proceeded to talk.“If you have any information please tell me as soon as possible so we can find this young boy…” I looked around and people everywhere were whispering to each other and gasping, some were even crying! “That’s all I have to say, now go to your classes, Thank you…” Mr. Polziko mumbled, and then quickly walked out as if he was going to crying.We all stood up and everyone began to talk about Tony asking questions like, where do you think he is? And do you think that murderer killed him?I quickly rushed out the gym I needed some fresh air. I ran outside and kneeled down on my knees. I picked up some snow from the ground examined it and then rubbed the freezing snow all in my face hoping it would wake me from this terrible dream, but those was no dream this was reality. My face started to feel really numb and I didn’t like the feeling so I brushed all the snow of my face, looked to the sky and screamed out.“Tony!!!”I listened out for an answer and the only answer I got was my echo screaming back at me ten times quieter each time. So, I brought myself to a standing position and stood there for a minute gazing out into the clouds until finally I headed to class, leaving only the tears from my eyes on the snowy ground. 

Chapter Six The Stairway to Hell    

   My class ended, and I slowly stood up, grabbed my bag, put it on my back and left the classroom to head to my locker with still no sign of Tony. Once at my locker, I opened it, grabbed my coat, shut it, and left the school, heading home.  

      To my surprise, when I walked out the school I saw my Mom in our red van, I ran over to see her to see if there was any update on the disappearance of Tony. There wasn’t, unfortunately, so I opened the door threw my bag in, sat down, then slammed the door shut using all my anger and sorrow that it almost fell into little tiny pieces on the floor, then my Mom road off. Mom knew not to talk to me in the car, as she could tell I was angry because no one could find my best friend Tony, so she was smart and kept quiet. I broke the silence by telling her about the note he gave me. She said that it had been all over the news and wasn’t surprised that I found out.

“You don’t really believe that he’s a Vampire do you? She questioned as I told her what my teacher said.

“Of cause not” I replied back unconfidently but then asked another question.

“Then what do you think are the two holes that this murderer leaves on his victim’s neck?”

“I think it’s a lie just to get everyone aware that this murderer is dangerous, you know what the media is like these days, they make anything up so people will believe them and be shocked…”

My Mom said in a rather smart voice.

I wanted to believe what she said so I just nodded but a part of me wanted to believe that it was a vampire just to make it that more interesting.

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  The Ride home took about ten minutes and once we arrived home I kicked the car door open, grabbed my bag, pushed the door shut and ran inside my house. Mom followed carrying two bags of heavy groceries in both hands not bothering to ask if I could help.       

 Ten Minutes passed and Mom shouted out.“Jeremy! Come and walk the dog” I was outraged how could she make me walk the dog under these circumstances, I mean my best friend is missing and she wants me to walk a pathetic dog. I leaped downstairs looked at my Mom with the most evil look I have ever gave her and screamed.“No!” I paused then continued. “I don’t even like that stupid dog! Get rid of it!”

“Go straight to your room right now, don’t ever speak to me like that again!” she barked.

“I hate you!” I screamed and walked over to the stairs with my arms tightly crossed. As I stomped up stairs, trying to make as much loud as I could when each foot slammed against a step, a tear began to roll from her eye, she loved me so much, she wanted the best for me, and I didn’t care one bit, I was a teenager, and from now on I was going to do whatever I wanted when I liked.

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  I spent the night in my room, thinking about Tony, where would he be? It had been thirty five grueling hours since someone had seen him and everyone was starting to think we would never see him again. I didn’t like to think that, never seeing him again, scared me, he was like a brother to me, If I never saw him again I don’t see how I could live anymore. I’d probably crawl up in a tiny ball in a corner and die.      

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    I woke up at 3:26am and all I could think of was food, my stomach was grumbling intensely and I had to do something about it (Mom didn’t let me out of my room last night, so I couldn’t eat dinner). I stayed in bed for ten more minutes thinking about Tony and if he was safe at home yet. I called his cell phone yet no one answered which either meant he wasn’t found yet or he was fast asleep. I had to leap out of bed and go down to get some food because my hunger was so unbearable. So I picked up my cloths which were all scattered across the floor and walked over to my door. I opened my door as quiet as possible and went to the stairway, and then tip toed to the steps and proceeded down very slowly, trying not to make any noise at all. The front door was unlocked which was unusual, I figured Mom and Dad forget last night because Tony was on their minds and I was being a pain. I felt rather bad on what had happened with me and my Mom. I didn’t mean to moan at her like that but she should know not to ask me to walk a dog when my best friend is missing. I walked over to the door and twisted the lock on it, then creped to the kitchen, it was pitch black, so I searched for the light for a second then found It, I flicked it on, then turned around, the light burned my eyes like it always does in the morning, so I rubbed my eyes until I could see properly, then my heart started to beat ten times faster then normal, I wished that I hadn’t of turned the lights on because the sight in front of me almost gave me a heart attack, I gasped for air and almost fainted, I didn’t care about hunger anymore and Tony was taken right of my mind. Nothing could prepare me for what was in front of my eyes it was truly Hell! 

Chapter Seven Hell 

      Blood was smeared all over the walls, the sought of smell of a dead animal, I plugged my noise and looked in astonishment when I saw my Dad in the corner of the kitchen. He must off fell asleep in the kitchen which was rather odd but when I got closer I realized that that wasn’t the case. His neck was broken with blood all around it, a huge bruise on his head, nose broken, it looked like he slipped or fell, but not until I got really close did I notice that there was two huge fang holes in his neck, he had been brutally murdered like the other eight people, and was now dead. I bent down and looked at his lifeless body, I gave him a kiss on the cheek and mouthed the words.

“I love you Dad…”

A poodle began to form on the floor from the tears from my eyes, I was in so much shock that I didn’t know what to do. I rushed in the living room to get the phone and call police. Thankfully I saw Max in the corner and he looked fine absolutely sound asleep, with his feet up in the air as if he was running in his dream. I sat on the sofa scared to move one muscle, I pinched myself to see if I was in a dream, it was no dream, this was very real. I laid back, and stretched, but suddenly I felt something under me. The phone dropped from my hand and hit the ground with a loud bang. I noticed that I was laying down on something that felt very uncomfortable. I jumped up terrified to look at what I just laid on. It was only my Mom, I thought she was asleep as well, until I turned the lights on and found the same two fang holes in her neck. Blood was all over her as well, her eyes were wide open, it was like I was watching a horror movie. I closed her eyes and whispered in the ear of my Mom.

“Sorry for being a bad kid…” I took a breath and whipped the tear from my eye, then continued.

“I’ll take care of Max, I love you!” I gave her a kiss on the cheek and I warm hug not letting go for two minutes. I then stepped back and hit my back on something, I quickly darted around and hit it as hard as I could, throwing right and left punches, I opened my eyes slowly, hoping it was not the mysterious murderer. It wasn’t, thankfully, it was the wall in our living room. Angered and confused I rushed to the phone to dial 911, but before I could get there I heard a hug smash upstairs, followed by a door slamming. Silence followed the sudden sounds, after a minute I then proceeded to call 911. They took forever to pick up, but when they did, a woman’s voice answered the phone.“Hello, are you in trouble?” The woman asked.“YES, YES…ERR, I THINK THERES A MURDER, HERE, IN MY HOUSE!” I responded in a terrified voice.“We’ll, get the police there right away to help you… stay calm” The Woman tried to make me feel better by telling me to calm down but it wasn’t working, nothing could make me feel better at the moment, due to what had happened to me the past two days.

“My Mom an…” Suddenly, a wrinkly hand came over my mouth, preventing me from finish my sentence to the woman. I then found myself been dragged across the carpet by this mysterious person, his right hand over my mouth and his left hand tight around my neck. He dragged me to the kitchen then slung me against the dishwasher, my back hitting it hard. I looked at him, as he grinned evilly at me and whispered.

“Hello little boy!”

 “What do you want? Leave me alone!” I shouted out at him crying.“You’re Blood!” He chuckled in an evil tone. He was wearing black tight pants and had some sort of grayish black gown on, his hands were as wrinkly as his face looked horrible. He had brown hair stretching over his eye, a little goatee and big dark bags under his red eyes. His pants were ripped at the knees with blood on them, and on his chin were spots of red blood. “YOU… YOU IDIOT!” I was still very scared of what he was going to do next. He was very tall so when he was standing right over me he looked like a giant tower.“Come on… I didn’t kill your dog…yet…!” He laughed in a menacing voice, I just wanted to stand up and punch him right in the face but I couldn’t, I didn’t have the guts. He then bent down to my eye level and whispered in my ear.“How’s…Tony?”

I had enough of him now, he murdered my Mom, my Dad and possibly my best friend Tony, I wasn’t going to take this anymore so I quickly pushed him out of the way and dived for our kitchen knife beside the sink. He fell back on the floor, in shock, and then shouted.

“Go on, do it Jeremy! Kill me!” I paused for a minute thinking how did he know my name, I then pushed all my thoughts aside and ran up to him, eyes closed, holding the knife in my right hand ready to bring it down on him. As I swung the knife at his body, he suddenly turned into dark smoke, and I tripped and fell almost cutting myself with the knife. I was now against the garbage can in our kitchen with the knife in my hand shaking like a rattle snakes tail. I looked around the room carefully with my eyes to check if he was still here. I slowly stood up and he was no where to be seen, just as I thought I scared him away I heard this loud swoosh sound behind me, I twisted and there he was with smoke around his whole body. He then kicked the knife out of my hand sending it half way across the room.“What know, Mr. Kwayk?” He asked me, while grinning. I didn’t know what to do I stepped back slowly but then he pulled me against his body and placed too cold blooded hands on my neck. He then began to rub the large vein on the side of my neck very soft and slowly licking his large lips. At this point I was kind of freaked out and I asked.“Who ar…”  But before I could finish he placed when dirty finger on my lip and whispered.“Shhhh…” “My name is Mr. Frapino…” He paused then continued.“I am…A VAMPIRE!” He laughed.Still stroking my neck he slowly started to come closer as if he was going to bite me. A vampire I thought to myself, they don’t exist he’s lying, but I soon realized he was telling the truth when he through me to the ground and opened his mouth, allowing me to see his huge fangs. He then came down on me, fangs first, aiming for the purple vein on my neck. I quickly moved my neck out the way and his face smacked against the hard wooden floor. I then reached out to the knife near the chair, picked it up and without and hesitation used all my anger and frustration and placed it in his spine.“Arrrrrggghhhh!” He screamed. He stood up trying to get the knife out of his back, he started to walk around the kitchen in a circle for thirty seconds trying to get it out, I found it funny and started t laugh, but my laughter suddenly stopped when he twisted his head round and looked at me, with his blood shot eyes. He then grinned and said.

“I’m a vampire, not a human this pathetic knife can’t kill me, only a wooden stake through the heart can kill me!” He chuckled. He then used all of his strength to take the knife out, he tugged and tugged until the bloody knife immerged from his boney back. He then threw it on the ground, dark red blood smeared all over it. He then turned around to show me his back, I could see the place where the knife stabbed him, there was tons of blood flowing out splattering all over the floor around him. So he quickly flexed all his muscles and suddenly I began to see his skin roll over the open sore, and with in seconds his back looked as good as new. He then pounced to the ground slurping up all the blood he’d lost until there was none left. He then looked up at me, grinned, and chuckled.

“Any last words before you die Je…” but before he could finish his deathly sentence the door made a large sound.“BANG, BANG, BANG!” We both glanced over, curious on whom it was. The door then flung open and the police that I called were here finally.“POLICE!” The policemen shouted out as they came running through the hallway turning lights on pointing there guns everywhere. I glanced over to see the murderer (or now known as Mr. Frapino the vampire), and he was no where to be seen. I then looked over to the kitchen window and it was broken, glass everywhere. He probably leaped out the window and sprinted away into the dark night. The police then came in the kitchen and pointed a gun at me ready to shoot until he realized I was just a kid. He looked over and saw my Dad in the corner, dead. The five men walked over and checked his pulse making sure he was dead. They all nodded to each other then proceeded to collect the two dead bodies in the house and take them outside. It was good the police came because if they were to come any later I would have been dead with two large fang holes in my neck.  

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      The police were, still in my house looking around for clues, and I was still in the same position that the vampire left me in. I hated my life now, no Tony, no Mom and no Dad, all I had was my dog Max, who didn’t witness anything he was still snoozing in his crate. I crawled over to the knife that I stabbed Mr. Frapino with, and examined it. The police were all upstairs and I was on my own so in frustration I cut my left arm with the knife. I made a slit in my arm, and blood was already dripping from it, I quickly stood up grabbed a towel and rapped it around my bleeding arm. Back then, I thought me just cutting myself with a knife was a good choice, that it would make me feel less pain, but I was wrong, that was the worse decision I had ever made, and it changed my life forever.    

 Chapter Eight The Hospital     

  I lay in the hospital bed that morning thinking, where did I go wrong? Why did I have to deserve this? Why me? The nurse came in and stroked the hair out of my eyes and said.“Everything’s going to be fine…”No it wasn’t, I said to myself, is this women crazy? Does she have a brain? Obviously not because I just lost my Mom, Dad and maybe Tony, so the answer was no, not everything was going to be fine.  

*   *   *     

Two days passed, and I was still in this stupid hospital. Everywhere was white, it smelled like an old people home, and I wanted to leave as soon as possible, but the doctors and nurses wouldn’t let me leave because I had no where to go and they were still waiting on the blood tests to return. I began to think about my Mom and Dad, and how much they loved me. Then I remembered the last thing I said to them, and a tear rolled from my eye, down my cheek, and on to the bed. If I could go back in time I would have told them that I loved them so much and that I would always love them for as long as I lived, but I couldn’t do that now, I had to stick with the fact that the last impression I left with them was a terrible one.     

 I glanced over to the door seeing it creek open and a doctor peeked though, and then came walking in.“How are you?” He asked in a cheerful voice.Al I had to do was look at him, and he could tell by the expression on my face that I wasn’t that good.“Oh, I see…” He sneezed then continued.“Well, I have a surprise for you…” He twisted his body and shouted.“Come on Max!”Max ran through the door, looked around the room then saw me, he suddenly jumped up at me and licked me all over my face. Normal I wasn’t that happy to see Max, but he was the only part of my family left so I was overjoyed when I saw him. “Now, seen as the situation you are in, Jeremy, we decided to let the dog stay here with you” I smiled up at the doctor and mumbled.“Thanks…” 

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    Another day passed and I was still in this horrible hospital, I thought about just leaving but I couldn’t, the doctors would check up on me every five minutes to see if I was alright. I glanced over to my wrist where I had cut my self four days ago and it was completely healed, I found this strange because when I usually get a cut it stays there for a month or so then disappears, but with this one it only lasted four days, maybe not even that, this was the first time I’d seen it since I cut it. There was no sign of it anywhere, no little cut, nothing, I glanced over to my other arm checking I had the right one and I did, the other arm had nothing on it as well.      

The nurse came in and asked if everything was alright and I nodded, as she was just about to leave, I remembered something and quickly shouted out.“Wait!”She turned around and walked back up to my bed and said. “Yes?”“When you examined me the night I came in here was there any injuries on me, for example a cut?” I asked in a curious voice.“No, nothing, you were spotless”I looked at her confused and then after ten seconds of looking her dead in the eye I nodded. She raised her eyebrow at me shook her head and left the room. As soon as she left I sat up and examined my arm again, still there was no cut there, I remember fully that I cut myself that night, so there was no doubt that I didn’t cut myself. I began to think maybe it was the knife, maybe I cut myself and I imagined the blood coming out, but that couldn’t have happened because I also stabbed the vampire in the back with the same knife, and tons of blood was flowing out of his body, then he licked it up off the floor. The thought of him licking up the blood made me pull a sort of sickly face, and made me want to be sick, but luckily that feeling went away, and I laid down again. I looked up at the plain ceiling thinking what could it be? How could a deep sore go away with in one night? And then it came to me, the reason It went away so fast was because I was a VAMPIRE! I forgot to wipe the knife after it had been used for stabbing Mr. Frapino the vampire, therefore his blood was still on the knife, so when I cut my self the blood from the knife went into the blood in my arm, that’s why the bloody cut went away that night, because my skin rolled over it just like the vampires skin did with his cut in his back. Now I had vampires blood flowing through my body, and I was not a human any more I was a blood sucking VAMPIRE! 

Chapter Nine gaining Powers      

      I awoke the next morning feeling different then usual. I was full with energy and I began to see what was happening one minute before it actually happened, like for example, I was lying down in my bed with my eyes closed and in my head suddenly I started to see a doctor walking through the door and Max running up to him and jumping up at him. The only downside with this was that everything was in black and white in my head which I found quite odd. Strangely five minutes later, that exact scene happened, but not in my head in real life. This came very useful to me, because I could see something in my head, then make sure it didn’t happen in real life, it was pretty cool. I guessed the murderer used this skill when I first tried to swing the knife at him and he vanished into black smoke. That reminded me about the murdering vampire, Mr. Frapino. There was no news on his capture which still meant he was out there plotting his next kill. I had to get revenge, I had to get payback. I said to myself that by the end of the week I would meet him and kill him to end his horrible terror. I figured he was keeping Tony trapped somewhere, by the way he said to me ‘How’s Tony?’ and I also figured that the only reason he was keeping Tony was because Tony was the only person I had left that I cared about, a part from Max. This was very smart of him though because he knew I’d do anything to get him back. The only thing I didn’t understand was why did he want me? Why does he want me to come to him? What was so great about my blood? This I didn’t know and really didn’t want to know.  

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    For the next few days, I found out more interesting skills I could do with the vampire’s blood swirling around in my body. I could now speak in five different languages and pick up stuff that I couldn’t before. Last Thursday I was eating my lunch and Max suddenly jumped on my bed and started eating my meatballs. I told him to get off but he wouldn’t listen. Suddenly my right arm jerked out and picked him up by his neck. I held him high up in the air with one hand clenching his neck and began to shout at him. I then squeezed harder and slung him back on the ground. He whined and didn’t dare look at me for five minutes. An hour later I went down to pet him and apologize to him. I really don’t know what I was thinking when I did that, it was almost like the vampires blood was controlling me. I also started to see through walls. I heard a huge bang on the wall to the right of me last night and it made me almost jump out of my skin. I looked closely at the wall imagining what the bang could have been but within in a minute I didn’t need to imagine any more. I stared dead at the wall for a minute and I began to see shades of people moving around. The more I looked at the wall the more I began to see. After two minutes I started to see extreme colour and detail like never before. All of these skills I gained were great and to be honest I didn’t see what was so bad about been a vampire until I looked in the mirror. The past week I had changed hugely. My face was pale white and I was a lot skinner then I used to be. My eyes looked darker then usual and had changed from the colour green to black. My shoulders had started to grow inwards and my posture was absolutely terrible. All of this was nothing until I opened my mouth and check out my teeth. As soon as I opened my mouth I saw two huge fangs that looked like they were ready to kill. They were as sharp as a knife but when you touched them you felt nothing at all. It was almost like there were two dead teeth in your mouth. When I tried to clean my teeth the toothbrush had no chance when it came to my fangs. The brush would wipe across my fang once and split it into. Once this happened twice I knew I had to stop or the doctors would be suspicious on why there were tons of broken tooth brushes in the hospital bathroom.     

       I started to get bored, and I hadn’t seen Mom and Dad since last week. So I was in really bad need of a picture of them together, that’s when I knew I had to get out of this place, who knew how long I’d be in here for it smelt horrible, the food taste like it hadn’t even been cooked, and I wasn’t allowed to get up out of my bed without a nurse without me. So I decided that I was just going to leave for an hour to grab some pictures from home. So there it was, decided, I was going to leave tomorrow night for an hour then return (I wanted it to be at night because no nurses or doctors check on me at night, so I wouldn’t get caught!). My mind was made up, so I turned over and decided to have a little nap. I fell asleep with in five minutes, not knowing that tomorrow night I was going to find out something that would make me cry, even harder then I did when I lost my Mom and Dad.   

Chapter Ten The Departure  

     My blood tests came back and the doctor asked if he could speak to me in private, and I agreed. He closed the door, shut the curtains and then pulled up a chair next to my bed to talk to me. “Now, Jeremy, how are you?” The doctor asked.“Ok… I guess?” as soon as I answered his question he started to jot down what I just said on a piece of paper, I tried to look what it said, but his hand was over the writing.“Are you feeling any different then usual?” “No” I lied, I felt better then normal actually, I could see and hear better then normal, and the new powers I had gained felt great.“Well, we received your blood tests and…” He stopped for a second then continued.“…We have never seen anything like it before…”  He then stood up and grabbed a little flash light and mumbled. “Open your mouth, please…” I was just about to open my mouth but then remembered about my new fangs that had grown in my mouth, if he saw them he might think I was the murderer, so I shook my head and said.“No”He looked at me for a second, and then said.“Come on… let’s not be silly now… open wide!”Once again I shook my head and told him no.  Puzzled, he looked at me for a minute, and then left without saying goodbye. Now, I  knew I had to leave tonight, and never come back, I could already tell the doctor was suspicious, what if he brought in a gang of doctors tomorrow to hold me down so they could check my mouth, and my new fangs.  *   *   *            I Woke up, looked over to the clock and it was 1:39am, I sat up, leaped out of bed and shook Max to wake him up.

“Come on boy, its time to go” I whispered to him. He stood up, stretched all four legs then stared at me. Now I hadn’t really planned on how to escape yet, so I sat back down and thought of the best way to leave, while not getting caught. I couldn’t go out my door and walk downstairs because some one would see me, so I glanced over to the window, knowing it was my only option. I walked over to the window, and opened it as high as it could go. I put when foot out the window, and then the second. It sounds crazy, but the next thing I did was asked Max to climb on my back, he did as he was told and leaped up on my back, put to legs around my neck, and the other two around my waist. I then turned around facing my hospital bed for the last time. I now put my whole body outside, still keeping I tight grip on the window with both hands. I looked down, and thought, should I just, jump? No, I would die, it would be too far of a drop. Suddenly, my left hand slipped and I was now holding my whole body weight and Max’s weight, with one hand. I put my left hand on the wall, and unbelievably my fingertips stuck to the wall. Crazily, I attempted to put my right hand on the wall, and it worked, it stuck to! I not only had super strength, super hearing and many other skills, I now could crawl on walls, being a vampire was great. At least that’s what I thought!

 Chapter Eleven 

      The slipper fell of my foot into the dark night below me as I continued crawling down the wall. It started to rain about halfway down, I almost slipped at one point and fell down but I thankfully regained my grip and continued to crawl down. The only thing I could hear was Max’s moaning in my, I could tell he was cold and scared like me but both of us knew we had to be brave and push through it.

All of a sudden, Max slipped from my shoulders, I looked around and he was now hopeless, falling down to the ground, nearing his death. Without thinking I jumped, as I fell downwards to the concrete floor I began to think about how much I missed my family, and that I do anything to see them again. I grabbed Max’s stomach still in mid air and held him close to me, hoping that if I would die he would hopefully live. I closed my eyes and hoped for the best, suddenly I landed on my feet, I opened my eyes one at a time, to see that I was kneeling holding Max in my hand. I had survived! We’d survived the thirty feet fall, and the best thing about it was I wasn’t even feeling any pain. It was like I was a cat, if I fell id always land on my feet. Max licked me on my face as I let go off him and whispered.

“Now let’s go get some pictures!”

I stood up looked into the dark night and then proceed to walk.

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      I had been walking for twenty minutes and there was still a thirty five minute walk left to go. I began to think about how I fell from the hospital, caught Max, landed on my feet, and felt no pain. Maybe it was a vampire skill I gained, that I’d always land on my feet. I then started to think that I was invincibly, that nothing could stop me when I was a vampire.

 

       On the walk I thought of more skills I had gained that I hadn’t tried out yet. Super Speed! I hadn’t tried that yet, I remembered that Mr. Frapino the night of the murdering fled with in seconds, maybe I could do that, maybe I could be at my house in thirty seconds, instead of thirty five minutes. I lifted Max up on my back again and said in my head.

“Ready, set, go!”

I then started to sprint as fast as I could go, at first I felt no different until I looked over to the side and saw all the buildings and houses whizzing by us. Max’s tongue was flapping in the wind, as if he was sticking his head out of I car window, while someone was driving. I halted when I saw a glimpse of my house. Max flew of my back and fell on the hard ground because of the sudden stop. I rushed over to him and checked if he was feeling ok. He had a cut under his left leg but other then that he was fine. I glanced over to where I had stopped, and there it was, my House. I had sprinted to my house in record time, I was amazed. As I walked towards my front door, I began to feel nervous again. I looked in the window, and I couldn’t see anything, it was pitch black. I pushed our door open, very slowly, and reached my hand in to see if I could find a light. I found the light and switched it on. I closed the door on my way in making sure Max was still with me. I reminded myself that I was here fore one reason, and one reason only, to got photos.

  

I hoped this helps i organized it better! Thanks everyone for all your advice I'm still finishing the story I'll try and get more up later on.

 

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Zaster
Wait for it...

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I just did a word search for lesbians and came up dry.  I suggest you add some lesbians.

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LittleRocker
The Return

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Thanks Zaster

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LuckyGuess
hm

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You need a cover like this one to tie it all together.

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vagrancy
I'm probably Martie.

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I agree with the lesbian notion.

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