New here for a few hours. I started a comic series, and I know it sucks. I posted it to my friend and says it sucks.

Friend: I hate to be blatant and assholish, but it sucks.
Me: Figures
Me: But until I learn how to draw better, what can I do
Friend: The art's fine.
Me: And your not being blatant and assholish
Me.: You're a good writer, but... the humor wasn't there, it was cliche and overly.. well, played out.

So if you dare, read my comic below. But am I the worst writer here?

Anyway, my question. The script is still young so there might be a chance to save it. How can I improve my comic so it's not cliche and overly.. well, played out. When I wrote it I admit I had Detroit Rock City stuck in my head. What was in mind was a comic which just went straight out in weirdness. I have a hard tme showing humor though, and the humor which does appear come oout better in different ways. It's also sick which is what I tried to portray here. So is there any chance to save this comic or should I just not even bother?

Thanks alot.

And NO I have not taken acid or researched it. A stupid mistake on my part.

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I've seen way worse. I didn't find anything wrong with it, its just not very funny. Also the narration boxes in the first panel were sort of uncalled for.

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So how can I improve? How can I make it funnier?

Well, you claim your humor is sick. I did not feel your comics were sick at all. Perhaps you're holding back your inner funny. Also I highly suggest losing that first panel narration for no reason. I don't really think you did a bad job at all. Practice helps you get your ideas across better. Over time you may have a firmer grasp on how to present your stories in 3 panel format. I think you're off to a good start and you should keep at it.

This is definitely more of a Narrative than a comedy. Easy to read through though.

Number 4 was good because the timing was there and the punchline was worded well and not completely expected. The others just kind of chug along at a leisurely place, not bad yet not particularly amusing. Making this a really good one shot would've probably worked out better.

Or a series of one-panels.

for first comics, these arent bad, just remember not to overuse anything, that makes comics suck

I ratherly liked it.

I thought they were pretty good...

Here's another attempt...

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Thats awful. Seriously, thats bad.

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No really, here I am asking how to make better comics and then post that crap? What the fuck was I thinking? Maybe at the time I thought it was decent, but at the time there was a rush to get it finished... :(

No need to rush friend.

I suggest you enjoy making comics at a leisurely pace.

Fuck crabby's "leisurely pace". He's a slacker and full of shit. Really, don't listen to him, he's like the biggest flake on here.

I say shoot to make a thousand comics in a week. The overload on your brain (and sc's bandwith) will surely produce comedy gold.

I'm saying comedy gold, the overload. The overload, comedy gold.

Gold, man, gold.

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Fuck crabby's "leisurely pace". He's a slacker and full of shit. Really, don't listen to him, he's like the biggest flake on here.

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I love when you talk dirty.

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Now I'm hungry and horny.

Then again, I was that prior.

Likely I'll be that later too.

Man, I hate people who come on this site and are all like, "I such but heer r my comiks neway boohoo imma go cut my rists now". If you're not confident with your comics, don't make them or at least don't post them.

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Man, I hate people who come on this site and are all like, "I such but heer r my comiks neway boohoo imma go cut my rists now". If you're not confident with your comics, don't make them or at least don't post them.

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me im the one that sucks makeing comics

look at my comics thay suck

Its times like this when I think Brad should just close registration down and only allow new users on an invite basis.

Amen.

You fucking rednecks.

"Close the borders!"

Yeah, fuck you. Go eat some "buffalo wings" while masturbating to a Jeff Foxworthy book.

Jackasses.

All your funny was in that beard. Its a shame its gone.

Well it's not...it's not really gone, see. It's um.

It's sitting on my desk in a plastic bag.

Maybe you can glue it on and hope to be clever again.

Start with bad, gives you room to get better.
Most people never start.
The santa on acid idea was fairly original.

It's very hard to pull off drug humor in this format. I'm think that, in order to improve your comedic skills, you should branch out to somthing other than Acid Santa. If you like series, great. Do another few series' and then come back to Acid Santa. Do some comics that have NO chance for a follow up too.

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Here's the next one, and maybe the last one for the time being. I'll probably take your advice and make another scrip for the time being.

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Are we allowed to upload our own stuff?