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lorn_kennedy
June 19, 2011 11:44 AM

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joshb1214
June 19, 2011 3:58 PM

Decent. Coming from another non-donor, it needs work though. You tried to hard, too much text makes people not wanna read it, and you look like you chose backgrounds you like and tried to build something off of it. Not bad, just ehh

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evil_d
June 20, 2011 7:45 AM

The backgrounds fit, but Josh is right about there being too much text.  The dialogue bubbles in the middle panel are where most of the comedy lives.  You could cut out everything else and it would still be about as funny.  And any time you can achieve the same amount of comedy in fewer words, you should do so.

Keep working on it.  You'll get better.

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