Hmmm.
Well, as an honest critique... I think you use the narration a bit too much. I'm also seems like I need to know your friends to understand these jokes. Since I don't know them, I don't really get it.
But keep trying!
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...Trot and Cap'n Bill were free from anxiety and care. Button-Bright never worried about anything. The Scarecrow, not being able to sleep, looked out of the window and tried to count the stars.