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Dysphorikk
Stripcreator Newbie

Hey all, I am new to this whole Comic Strip thing. I would be very greatful for any suggestions, and topic ideas, codes and tips...

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"Never do today, what you can put off till tomorrow" --Me ~** dypshorikk**~

12-17-02 6:24am (new)
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Tasty
Has a tiny penis

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Well, there are only three strips, so it's hard to judge.

I had a hard time understanding who was who. A lot of it seems like inside jokes. I'm not sure if I really understand what kind of message you are trying to get across.

A tip I would have would be to fix the computer dude. I hate seeing things cut in half! HATE IT! And the splitter background comes in handy for those halfway dudes.

I don't really have any ideas for you, except try to make it clearer what you are trying to get across. Is precious the asian girl? Are they cyber lovers or something? CONFUSING!

12-17-02 10:10am (new)
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Dysphorikk
Stripcreator Newbie

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Yeah, i know alotta things need work...maybe this will help a bit....
Precious is a black teen-age girl. I use that one because i couldnt find a real black girl. She has a boyfriend currently, and the clown looking character is her bitter ex (BJ, Blow Job, Ben, dickface, pencil dick....he has many names :-D )

Scott is her ex's best friend and roomy. He has a BIG thing for Precious, and she knows it, but like i said she has a BF (BJ doesnt know that Scott and Precious still talk, and Crimson (who's real name is Amber) is BJ's new whore...i mean girlfriend...no wait, i was right, whore! :-D )

If you cant tell, this is my life :-D and I am Precious.... hope that clears a few things up.. you can catch the other half of the story on Scotts SC (Boogeman) the are really good as well. More witty. mine are kinda just there.

oh, also, which background where you talking about??

Thanx for the advice

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"Never do today, what you can put off till tomorrow" --Me ~** dypshorikk**~

12-17-02 11:01pm (new)
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Devin
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Actually, I didn't have too much trouble figuring out what was happening.

I have other gripes, though. First of all, too much of trying to explain your actions:

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lalallalalaal ::this is my mind wandering off in thought:::
No need to mention that your mind is wandering off in thought. Try to get it across using words and a minimal length of actions (i.e. "La la la *thinking*").

The third comic looks more like a chatroom/message board post than an actual comic, so I won't say much about it. However, I urge you not to use comics in this way; the comic is a powerful tool for communicating your views and beliefs, and it would be squandered if you use it in any other way.

With that said, I suggest that you use your second comic as a template for how to go about your future strips. The second comic doesn't waste too much dialogue, has few technical flaws otherwise, and has a nice punchline.

12-17-02 11:32pm (new)
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