Hello everybody,

I've been posting for about a year, and I'm wondering if anyone out there could give me a critique of my strip, Vegan Dad?

They start here: http://www.stripcreator.com/comics/Porternotes

I'd appreciate it.

Thank you.

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I've been reading since the beginning, or close to it.  I like your work.  I get the impression that it's a broadly accurate retelling of your actual life, exaggerated for comedic effect.  It comes across as honest, and earnest, and cynical, but also realistic.  Your comics are rarely hysterically funny -- which is expected for a serial -- but they're usually somewhat funny, and even when they aren't, they're still well-written.

In short, your comics are good and I hope you continue writing them.

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The what mentioned above is total fiction. Please don't take it seriously!

I just discovered them at the weekend, I like them!

Thank you for the encouragement.

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I enjoyed these, I'd previously rated them 'good', probably while drunk as I don't recall doing it. Probably a good thing too, I get myself a lot of Christmas presents courtesy of drunken eBay. Mmmm... drunken eBay.

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Dinosaurs had eggs bro, the chicken came way later.

The only critique I have is that they are a bit wordy.

Thanks, Gang.

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Is this based on your life? Some have a bit of wit to them, whereas others seem just like a comic-al retelling of something that happened to you, i.e. the "sexy look is funny" comic. 

If these are based on your life, then it's all well and and good. If these are fictional, then they could be a bit sharper with the wit. Most are pretty dry, without a compelling punchline. I did like the angry mob joke though. 

Keep on trucking regardless. You can only get better as you progress. 

(Note: I did not read all of them, just a sampling, so there's that...)

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Classic Boners...

Yeah, as a serial the stories usually build over a number of strips.

Nearly all of the stories are true or based on real experiences.

Thanks!

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They don't make me laugh all that much, but as a serial story they're very entertaining.  I enjoy following them.  I would put them in the category of a daily newspaper comic in terms of entertainment value as well as quality: In that, if you drew them yourself, I think you'd have a shot at getting them published in a newspaper.

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It was such a waste of everyone’s time and money that even the Tokyo stadium’s rape robots apologized– something they were programmed specifically never to do.

Thanks.

Today marks a year of Vegan Dad.

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OK... I actully put TOBOR into a strip.

Vegan Dad by Porternotes 5-28-15

What the hell is this all about. I AM TOBOR PLEASE INSERT ONE DOLLAR AND I WILL TELL YOU A STORY. A STORY OF INTERGALACTIC HEROISM AND EXCITEMENT. Let me guess. It starts out "A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away..." Actually, cheap-ass, it's about an aspiring actor who wears a robot suit in a department store because muthaf*$%s like you don't support community theater.

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Actually here is the Tobor Storyline.  

Vegan Dad by Porternotes 5-28-15

Where is your sister? She's at the back of the store. They've got a robot, you give it a dollar and it tells you a story. Your sister better not be giving a dollar to that damned robot! I'll go tell her. I never thought I'd say those words.

Vegan Dad by Porternotes 5-28-15

What the hell is this all about. I AM TOBOR PLEASE INSERT ONE DOLLAR AND I WILL TELL YOU A STORY. A STORY OF INTERGALACTIC HEROISM AND EXCITEMENT. Let me guess. It starts out "A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away..." Actually, cheap-ass, it's about an aspiring actor who wears a robot suit in a department store because muthaf*$%s like you don't support community theater.

Vegan Dad by Porternotes 5-28-15

Hey, there you are! Yeah, sorry I got.... ...distracted... Were you giving money to that robot. He tells a compelling story.

Vegan Dad by Porternotes 5-28-15

Ok, Robbie... I AM TOBOR. PLEASE INSERT ONE DOLLAR AND... Yeah, yeah, yeah... whatever. My family has given you, like, ten bucks already. What's the scoop? Actually, it's more like twenty. WHAT?!? It's the most money I've made in one day in four years with this gig.

Vegan Dad by Porternotes 5-28-15

Most of the time people ignore me. I'm a performance artist. I need to be heard. Well, you are in the back of a department store. I wanted to be at the front door to greet people as they came in the door. Why don't you move over to that retro arcade in the mall? This place gives me a 15% discount off non-sale items.

[Click to view comic: 'Vegan Dad']

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Let me know what you all think, please.

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HCRoyall wrote:

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They don't make me laugh all that much, but as a serial story they're very entertaining.  I enjoy following them.  I would put them in the category of a daily newspaper comic in terms of entertainment value as well as quality: In that, if you drew them yourself, I think you'd have a shot at getting them published in a newspaper.

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We should maybe put together a list in the FAQ of which art is public domain.

By the way, I share HCRoyall's and Injokester's confidence in this comic.  It's consistently good enough to be a serial, and you don't seem to have trouble with writer's block.  I wouldn't expect to make a career out of it, competition is stiff in the cartooning world these days, but if this sounds like something you want to do, I think you could find modest success with it.

I don't know thing one about newspaper publishing but I have some slight expertise with webcomic publishing.

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The what mentioned above is total fiction. Please don't take it seriously!

My first goal was to see if I'd have the interest to do it for a year. I did lag some over winter, but picked back up again in spring. My new goal is to have a year's worth of strips. I've got a little over 100 to go. If I do go offsite I'd like to create all new artwork. I have been creating backgrounds recently and stockpiling them. Next is character design. I sincerely appreciate the encouragement. Any advice is welcomed.

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I like these two recent strips, if I do say so myself.

Thoughts? Anyone?

Vegan Dad by Porternotes 7-08-15

I've got a funny idea for the comic. For a few strips, I change things up and pull a bit of a Caitlyn Jenner. Even change the name temporarily from Vegan Dad to Vagina Dad. You're not saying anything. Sell out.

Vegan Dad by Porternotes 7-08-15

C'mon, it would be funny. Gender confusion is no joke. Intolerance and ignorance is no joke. Take the high road on this one. So, you're saying go back to strips about poop eating and mean spirited inside jokes. Yep. Ok... um.. by the by... I picked up some new underwear for you. It might seem a little stretched out, but I assure you it's clean. Oh lord.

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I'm just sorry that we don't get to read "Vagina Dad".

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The what mentioned above is total fiction. Please don't take it seriously!

How about a comic about Vagina Dad & Penis Mom?  Call it "The Kardashian Capers"!

This series is for a recent comic competition.  The topic is current events.  I chose to address the situation regarding the recent backlash to “hunter/dentist” Walter Palmer who lured and killed a lion from a wildlife sanctuary in Zimbabwe.

Vegan Dad CC617 - 2 by Porternotes 7-29-15

Dude... I can't believe you lured a lion out of a wildlife sanctuary and killed it. What a low thing to do. You need to get the facts right before you start flappin' yer gums, partner. It wasn't what the media has made it out to be. There's no way you can convince me that this was anything other than cold blooded murder. That lion was stalking me. I was innocently driving through the bush and he started chasing me. You had a dead animal tied to your car. That was a hood ornament.

Vegan Dad CC617 - 3 by Porternotes 7-29-15

You smell something? No... It's coming from outside. It smells like fresh baked bread... or cake... or pie... That's it! Like a fresh baked apple pie. ...maybe I do smell it. I wonder what it is. Honey! There's a pie in the driveway on the hood of some car. Damn! I was hoping to bag the female.

Vegan Dad CC617 - 4 by Porternotes 7-29-15

You can't hunt in town. I have a permit. You can't hunt human beings. I have a permit. This isn't a hunting permit. This is a letter from the Ted Nugent Fan Club. No no no... it's not a hunting permit. That letter gives me permission to be an asshole.

Vegan Dad CC617 - 5 by Porternotes 7-29-15

You better just get out of here. I don't feel safe with you near my family. Wow. I'm sorry to hear that. I'd like to make it up to you. I don't think you can. Well allow me to give you a gift. It's a plush lion. Where did you get this? They just keep showing up outside of my office.

Vegan Dad CC617 - 6 by Porternotes 7-29-15

Well, I'd better get going. I'm sorry I almost killed you and your family. I do not accept your apology. I'm also sorry I killed that lion. I do not believe you. The next time I get the urge to take advantage of another living creature, I'll just stick to "feeling up" female patients when they're under anesthesia. Get back to Minnesota where you belong.

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