Well, I'm a noob, but I thought I'd share some of my comics anyway. Mine are political in nature, so I hope the topic hasn't been beat to death.

Feeding tubes are funny after all! by Dash4814 4-12-05

I can't believe it. First Terri Schiavo, then the Pope. All in one week! I know. It's tragic. They both really meant a lot to me. You knew Terri AND the Pope? No, I mean the pool in gym class. I figured they'd hang on for at least another week, but Tommy's got some unnatural talent for picking that kind of stuff. His mother must be proud.

Based on a true story by Dash4814 3-09-05

Skippy talks politics with The Clown So you're saying that gays should NOT be able to marry? That's right. But I think they should have some sort of separate institution. But they'd have the same rights as married folk? Right. It's separate, you know? But equal. I wonder if Rosa Parks knows about this. "Separate but equal"...hey, that has a nice ring to it.

Sorry, it's this trick knee... by Dash4814 3-09-05

Skippy talks about Bush with a hardcore liberal So what do you think of Bush's stance on-- BUSH IS A LYING REDNECK SACK OF CRAP AND SHOULD BE IMPEACHED! Well, I guess we're done here. Screw it, I'm going to Starbuck's.

Pacifinished with you! by Dash4814 3-09-05

Skippy tackles the tough issues So you're opposed to violence in all forms? YES! Even when attacked! I do not believe in violence! So if I took a baseball bat and beat you and your family senseless with it you wouldn't object or fight back? I would try to reason with you and make you see the error of your ways. And here I thought nuts only grew on trees. Try stuffing ME in your cheeks, Rodent Boy!

Comments are appreciated!

I'm not going to put it before each and every comic this appears in, so in general, narration is often not necessary in a comic. And in all the comics here, it was only semi necessary once. Try to avoid the big yellow boxes from now on, k?

Comic # 1: Okay, the first two panels have to be setting up to something good, but what? Once we reach the last panel, you lose and confuse your reader. What's up with Tommy and the pool? And why are they holding on for a week? And what does that have to do with feeding tubes?

Comic # 2: Again, my problem is in the last panel. Skippy's comment was funny, however, Clown's "'Seperate but equal'...hey that has a nice ring to it." should either appear before Skippy's statement somehow, or should be cut. Sometimes you have to make sacrifices of your work to get the humor quality you're looking for.

Comic # 3: Good. Best of the four. (By the way, this is the one where I said the narration was semi-necessary, otherwise we wouldn't understand why the donkey chooses to go to Starbuck's)

Comic # 4: Set up was boring, and, though Skippy's line was funny, it wasn't funnny enough to cover the long, boring, factual set-up. Again, hippie's line can be cut and Skippy's line could stand alone.

In conclusion, you don't have to fill all the boxes on the make a comic page. And you've got potential, kid! I give you 4 stars for now, don't ruin it.

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I'm not going to put it before each and every comic this appears in, so in general, narration is often not necessary in a comic. And in all the comics here, it was only semi necessary once. Try to avoid the big yellow boxes from now on, k?

Comic # 1: Okay, the first two panels have to be setting up to something good, but what? Once we reach the last panel, you lose and confuse your reader. What's up with Tommy and the pool? And why are they holding on for a week? And what does that have to do with feeding tubes?

Comic # 2: Again, my problem is in the last panel. Skippy's comment was funny, however, Clown's "'Seperate but equal'...hey that has a nice ring to it." should either appear before Skippy's statement somehow, or should be cut. Sometimes you have to make sacrifices of your work to get the humor quality you're looking for.

Comic # 3: Good. Best of the four. (By the way, this is the one where I said the narration was semi-necessary, otherwise we wouldn't understand why the donkey chooses to go to Starbuck's)

Comic # 4: Set up was boring, and, though Skippy's line was funny, it wasn't funnny enough to cover the long, boring, factual set-up. Again, hippie's line can be cut and Skippy's line could stand alone.

In conclusion, you don't have to fill all the boxes on the make a comic page. And you've got potential, kid! I give you 4 stars for now, don't ruin it.

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It's not a swimming pool, it's a betting pool. The kids are betting on when Terri and the Pope are going to die, and the boy in my comic is lamenting the fact that he had placed a bet on a day sometime in the future.

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I think you're right; that is what causes the confusion. I got it, but I had to read it twice to get it. The pool could have been "at the office" or "on the internet" and the confusion would have been avoided.

I disagree with 'chicka about #2 -- I think the last panel works great as it is. In fact, #2 is my favorite of the four.

I'm not real big on the punchline in #4. There are no new jokes, I guess, but puns involving the word "nuts" are older than most. It's not terrible, but it could have been better, I think.

Overall, I think you've got a handle on both how to make a comic and how to make a funny comic, so congratulations! You're already ahead of 90% of the newbies here. Keep up the good work.

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The what mentioned above is total fiction. Please don't take it seriously!

The pool reference seemed pretty obvious to me. But maybe that's because I spend more time at rotten.com than I do sleeping.

I got the pool reference immediately, too. But that's because I used to listen to Howard Stern when I was younger and he had a death pool.

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The giant three-phallused phallus of Uzbekistan will one day squirt the cosmic jizz of revenge all over Canada.

They're all interesting, but I suggest a backround!

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If you wanna eat a pineapple, eat a lemon. CHEEZ!

I liked these. A couple punchlines had too much exposition (you need less "lines" and more "punch"), but all in all pretty good. I agree you should take the time to add a background, though. It would make your strips more aesthetically pleasing.

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Destroying my reputation one post at a time.

I'll jump on the bandwagon. You show great promise--you know how to set up a punchline, which puts you way ahead of most noobs.

Some of the jokes have been done before, but I'll just consider them separate-but-equal as well.

Welcome to Stripcreator.

Pretty much everything that could be said has been said already. Though superfluous as it may be, the line "Try stuffing ME in your cheeks, Rodent Boy!" just struck me as hi-larious.

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Thar's a snake in mah boot!

Thanks for the comments guys! I appreciate it.

I'll take your ideas into consideration when writing.

I didn't like these, but I don't like dogma in my comics. I prefer more universal truths that don't require the reader to agree with your personal beliefs. I did, however, like "Sorry, it's this trick knee...", though I didn't understand the title. I must disagree with chicka's statement that

I think you can lose the narration. The Starbuck's reference would still come through.

I do agree with chaod that you have great promise... if you choose a less annoying topic than politics.

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